Comments on 'Storyteller'

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Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-12-14
I can really see how hearing that would sting, but she really took it to heart and found something wonderful with it, which to me is amazing. I loved seeing her try and try to work through it and finally just breaking through, awesome job!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2014-12-04
Aww, how great to see Snowfall's beginnings as a storyteller! (though I do feel for her after Shimmer's off-hand comment :/) I like to see her parents' different personalities and parenting styles. The last scene was really cute - I'm glad her father chose to keep listening to her stories to avoid discouraging her.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-07-31
I really like the way this one progressed -- from Snowdrop's uncertainty and quiet hurt at being thought "still a cub" (which stings to no-one so much as those on the cusp between cubhood and adulthood!), to her contemplation and methodical decision about how to address the problem (which itself is part of the reader's understanding about what makes her HER), and then to the sense of community that the storytelling sequence hinted at. I really liked getting to see this era of the tribe come alive, and to see the genesis of what being a storyteller MEANS to Snowfall.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-21
I really felt for Snowdrop/fall there at the beginning. I've been in that position too, overhearing someone I thought of as a friend saying something negative (though quite fitting) about me to another person in secret and it hurt so bad (though I think Shimmer/Starskimmer said it with less malice compared to my real life situation). I like how this worked as a catalyst for Snowdrop/fall finding her own path, in a way. Though I hope Shimmer/Starskimmer gets some small commupance for that comment - not very nice at all!
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2013-04-11
Oooh, I loved this story so much! :D This painted such a beautiful picture of the tribe, for one thing, with its various members telling Snowdrop stories. I also totally agree, it's great seeing her personality traits shown as they must have been in her teenage years. Really nicely done, showing a teenager overall; she seemed yong and still a cub in a lot of ways, but also getting close to finding herself as an adult in the tribe! I loved how Dreamberry and Bearheart both parented Snowdrop quite a bit in the story, but in different ways based on their personalities. And of course, the ending was just a great icing on the cake. :)
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2013-02-24
I really like how certain personality traits are so clear even when Snowdrop is a young teenager - her tendancy to think things over, for better or for worse, especially. It's a great contrast between her and Shimmer, and a really good use of an offhand comment inspiring something rather life changing. I also really enjoyed the contrast with Snowdrop finding her storytelling gift to how we've watched Crackle just grow up telling stories. It's an interesting tale, and as Mel commented, the reversal-ending is just too cute!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-02-19
I kinda like how the search in the end was the goal. It's such a neat and fitting way for someone to fall in love with telling stories.
I also like the interaction here between Snowfall and her parents. Such things like the rituals really help to create a nice fuzzy feeling and it dose feel like family interaction.
But my favorite thing was the end and how rolls were reversed from what you usually expect from a good night story ^^ Especially with the "Just one more" element ;D
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