Comments on 'A Burst of Summer'
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New! Entered: 2014-12-26
|I can so feel with Chicory! I know what winter-depression is like. But I'm happy for her, that she can find her good mood again in watching the children and their fun.|
New! Entered: 2014-11-19
|Great use of acrostic. I like how this shows chicorys seeming tendency to be sadder during winter is tempered by the presence of life filled cubs|
New! Entered: 2014-01-15
|Great poem! I actually didn't notice the acrostic before I read your comment, but going back and looking it over, it's really quite clever! I like the idea of the cubs giving Chicory some comfort in the winter, it sounds like a great way to combat her winter blues. Your images/feelings of the scenes were very well placed. I really liked the line "Ice locks away the river's fun", it seemed very fitting to Chicory's mindset!|
New! Entered: 2013-09-11
|A burst of summer is a very fitting title for the feelings this poem evoked; it was very clear what emotions you aimed to make the reader experience and you did so very skillfully!|
New! Entered: 2013-03-01
|When I had the idea for this poem, it occured to me that at this point in the RTH timeline, if you count the older group, this is the most cubs that have been around during Chicory's life at once! :) I enjoyed writing this, and I hope the acrostic-ness (is that a word?) wasn't too subtle.|
New! Entered: 2013-01-23
|This is darling. I love how the first part talks so much of the regret of the winter putting the world asleep and all the fun away and the second how some joy still can be found through the little sunshines in our life. |