Comments on 'Forgotten Regrets'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-07-13
Wow, that life would mess anyone up!! Barring seeing your whole family get murdered, a lot can/would happen in 500 years. Of course lovemates would Recognize other people eventually! But the abandonment theme is so strong in Cloudfern! Poor Guy!! Glad Brightwood is alive and well after all and that she will talk some sense into him.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2015-03-30
This really does such a wonderful job of showing us some of the many experiences that have gone into making Cloudfern who he is. For me, it framed the problem in the "present" -- his feelings towards Willow, even after what she did turned out all right and he had his beloved sister back -- in a really necessary way. I have to agree, though -- after all that, and everything I know about his life, I just want the guy to catch a break! ;-)
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-08-03
What a sad string of stories, but you've framed it with such lovely imagery, of wolves and running and memories. Poor Cloudfern. I hope he really has forgotten those regrets. I was really hoping that this would be one of those 4-times-he-was-crushed and end with a happy scene, but Brightwood sounds so serious I don't want to get my hopes up. Great look back at some of the major events in his life though!
Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2013-01-18
This was such a nice piece that really helped me get a view of Cloudfern I never really had before. It was nice to see those snippets from many portions of his life that led to why he is feeling how he is here and now.

I, too, would love to listen in on the conversation between Brightwood and Cloudfern that we didn't get to see. I hope we get to know what they said someday :)
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2013-01-16
This was fantastic - I love how you used the moon theme to connect so many moments of Cloudfern's life. Poor Cloudfern, he lost so much! It was great to see a lot of moments I had been curious about - especially about him and Greenweave, but it was also great to finally see some of his side in the whole conflict with Willow and Beetle. Seeing all that came before it, you can really understand where it's coming from. And I absolutely loved the sentences framing the story!

I'm now really curious what Brightwood had to talk with him about. I do hope you'll not be a tease and share it sometimes!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2013-01-15
Oh, I'm so glad to see this story in print. I think it gives a lot of depth to understanding what Cloudfern was feeling during the aftermath of his sister's unwrapping, and how his anger at Willow wasn't something that just happened. There was so much built up over Cloudfern's life... from that very early traumatic experience. I definitely would love to read about what happens during the conversation w/ Brightwood and after... and maybe should do some writing of my own as well.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-01-15
This was HEARTBREAKING!
Poor Cloudfern. He truly lived a life of loss. You made this clear by so many little things happening in his past and present.
I liked the interaction with Sunlight the most I guess, followed closely by Starskimmer. It's great how you picked up on events we saw and didn't see yet.
And personally I like how you wove in how Cloudfern accepted Greenweave back in his life. It truly showed that he did it out of love but also left me with thinking it was a little fear to be left alone as well.
It's somehow neat to see Cloudfern so vulnerable, yet so strong. Always fighting it but failing it sometimes. The reason for his cubname and the way the moon theme carried through was a great idea and I loved seeing the conversation with Beetle from his POV as well and how.. tragic the misunderstanding here is. It is really heart-wrenching to see both sides and their fears and sorrows. It really hit home with me since this situation feels so real (and familiar) to me.
And there is just this open ending with Brightwood. I'd love to know why she came. A part of me really just wants to shield him from further harm.
With this it's really great to have his reaction at the news of the return of his trauma. It really feels as if he needed a point to make his peace with this and maybe this is a good start?

Anyway it makes me also want to see something good and happy for Cloudfern again! O_O
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