Comments on 'Twelve Days 'til Midwinter'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-11-22
This is a really sweet holiday read! I really like the way you've brought the ancestors to life with their requests. So many vivid personalities are touched on here, and it's really adorable to see the lengths that little Whistle will go through to get the green sapphire as a gift for her mother. There's really a strong sense of mother-daughter ties behind this all. The song you based this on forms a perfect backdrop!
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2015-02-09
Well this seems quite complicated for the young Whistle, having to go around offering to trade only to be told tribemates either didn't have what she needed or wanted something else. I wonder what Leather decided the favour would be.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-23
Amazing that you could keep track of all the trades! And that you could help me as reader keep track of them as well :) Funny, wonderfully complicated and such a sweet ending.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-04-11
Oh gosh, did I really never comment on this? This is just a fantastic story -- full of wonderful tribal-life detail and interaction, especially things like the feud between Snaptwig and Rhythm, an intriguing side-tale I'd love to know more about! it's always fun to get a hint that not all relationships in the past were always harmonious -- makes tribal life feel that much more real. I thought that using the traditional song as framework was brilliant for the way it underpins the tribal "economy" of favors and barter, showing what's valuable to whom, and why. It's all the details that make the past tribe come alive, which I love.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2013-04-08
Thanks for the feedback, folks! My motivation for this one was the "12 Days of Christmas" song, and the hopes of trying to catch some of the sense of "wheeling & dealing" sorts of to thing which must be rather common among the tribe, since folks don't have money! I had a lot of fun taking the actual lyrics of the holiday song and finding a way to translate them in some form into the items Windsong was trading for. Once I managed to get my flow-chart of figured out of who wanted what/who could provide what, this fic practically wrote itself!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2013-01-09
I love! this story:) The intricacies of the trades and execution and how you depict what life in the tribe must really be like! How it truly sometimes takes bartering with so many people to get what you want. And there's so much wonderful detail included. This was beautiful.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2013-01-06
Wow, I absolutely love this idea, and the execution is formidable :). So much is going on here! I especially love how much we see of our ancestors here. I totally want to know what was going on between Snaptwig and Rhythm now!
The trading is such a lot of fun, and I love how the elves are characterized with it. You can see who is being fair to little Whisper and who's looking for gain, and so much more!
And of course, the trading itself is absolutely priceless! Poor Whisper, that she even can remember it all at the end! But at least all the trouble paid off :).
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2013-01-05
There are so many things I love here. First of all how eager Windsong is to get that gift. Second the show cast of ancestors and what they do and their relationship and characters showing here. It gives quite a good idea how the tribe was back then. When we see ancestors they are usually singled out with others but here it is so much more interweaved. (My favorite has to be Rhythm's anger on Snapwing. I do see a story within a story and I just loved how Whisper stood her ground there.)
And third, I love the trading aspect and how it dose show some charcter of each elf. Leather especially. WHat a gentle and good soul he is and somehow it dose make me curious what his favor will be in the end. There are so many little stories in this story. I love how it branches out into so many directions giving a feel of a full blown vivid tribe.
And yeah.. hehe. When you read through this, you learn to be grateful for the invention of money in or culture. Makes it a lot easier XD
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