Comments on 'Spirit-Cub'

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Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-12-13
Oh! Information on the firstcomers in comic form! We can see what a few look like! I really enjoyed reading this story, Gireth and the spirit bears are really interesting and how the Cheiftess makes the connection with them and Newt.
My only minor discomfort about the story is how stiff the conversation seems at the start, very awkward.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2014-06-26
Thanks for the comments, everyone! :) An overall observation, now from a bit of a remove of having completed the project: I would agree that this story does a good job of covering a lot of ground. But by its nature, I feel like it doesn't do that good a job of functioning as a "graphic story" -- I feel like it doesn't really take advantage of the medium to tell the story.

That could just be the nature of this particular story which… is all about "telling stories". (And I did like the way that came out, with layers and layers of storytellers within it.) But what I mean is, with the exception of the first two pages, there isn't a lot of panel-to-panel action to help tell the story. It's really more like a succession of splash illustrations with accompanying text. In that sense it's not really different from an illustrated picture-book. Which is fine! But I think it doesn't make it such a great example of the comic format.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2013-09-25
This was a wonderful treat for the eyes! The layout was great and flowed well with the story and I absolutely love all the scenes with the spirit bears; the coloring make them really stand out, especially the one on the cliff in the mist. A great atmosphere!
Ellen Million
New! Entered: 2013-01-10
This was a tremendous undertaking, and you pulled it off with flare. The artwork and story are both really strong, and there were so many delicious little details to enjoy; it was a delight to read this!
Kyna Hansen
New! Entered: 2012-12-29
I'm really glad to see another graphic story! This is great. It read a lot like an EQ comic, but with obvious RTH flare and Holly's art style. Something I noticed was how much Easysinger's face changed based on whether or not her upper lip was drawn in. Just an interesting visual detail to me.
Hannah Bochart
New! Updated: 2013-03-26
This is lovely! What a beautiful story and so well brought to life with the artwork here!

This story has so many layers, especially considering Easysinger's eventual fate. And Blacksnake's slaying of the bear who killed her has even more weight knowing that those bears are considered off-limits.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-12-25
You've both done such a marvelous job on this! I'll leave page-by-page comments on the artwork, but I just wanted to remark here about how lovely it is to see how tribal history is kept alive from generation to generation, and how individual members of the tribe don't have to be considered Howlkeepers in order to have a personal investment in telling the important tribal stories. Fabulous work!
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-23
That was a fascinating read, and well written and put together! :D I agree, you did a great job and spanned so much info in just 6 pages, without any one of those pages feeling the slightest bit rushed or crammed. It flowed at a nice, easy pace and kept me interested from first frame to last. I really do love the ending, which leaves me feeling hopeful and wistful.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-22
I really, really, really liked the flow of this story and the tenderness between Easysinger and Newt, in which the whole story about the Spirit Bear was wrapped into. Great job on telling a story that covers so many different time points in "only" 6 pages.
But something that stood out for me the most, was Esysinger here. She is definitely as much your character as is Blacksnake. You give her so much life and personality!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-12-20
Thanks SO much for the hard work Holly! I'm so glad to see this one up :)
I doubt words can express how great this is. I hope it will inspire a few more people to comment on everything up on the website ;)

Just love the tale and I love to see Newt in two periods of time,sharing with the kids what he enjoyed as a kid. And I sure hope one day he'll get to see a Spirit bear :D
Guido Klein
New! Entered: 2012-12-20
How wonderful - like an early Christmas present!
I love this story. It is like a tribal legend passed on through the generations.
And all the details in each panel: wild life, backgrounds and the glimpses of so many ancestors. Great!
Thank You very much for sharing!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-12-19
I really like the information about firstcomers and how early wolf riders remembered Gireth. It's neat that there's an almost unspoken rule about not hunting spirit bears. My fav part though is how newt passes down easysingers story
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