Comments on 'The Trick to Snowflake'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-23
Such a sweet moment between brother and sister! I like that Whitestag seems to get Snowflake/Quick Fang as few others in the tribe do. Having him teach her to hunt is a perfect idea and Snowflake's actions were both adorable and a great mix between wolf cub and elf child.
Kyna Hansen
New! Entered: 2012-12-29
I had confused Quick Fang's cubname of Snowflake with Snowfall's cubname of Snowdrop so the first couple of paragraphs had me bewildered. Whitestag should have been a been the clue but it was just not clicking. I thought Snowflake's dialog was handled well and Whitestag certainly read a lot like True Edge.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-12-28
I can only agree - it's great to see Whitestag handling his little sister deftly and how he knows she is unusual for an elf but that her special talents can be honed to work in her favour. It's also great to have this from his POV and learn more about him in the process, too! And there is just something so loving about how he interacts with his sister that's just heartwarming.

And I might be partial but the line about Snowfall was my favourite :D!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
Awwwww!!! I really like that Whitestag had such a wonderful softspot fo his sister! This is just precious. I also like seeing Quick Fang as a cub, and seeing how she's still, in so many ways, the same.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
Aw, this was such a sweet story. Nice to see Whitestag as such a caring brother, and good job portraying a young Quick Fang!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
I really enjoyed Whitestag's patience here with his sometimes-difficult sister, and I love your handling of child Quick Fang. Lovely work!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2012-12-08
Great look at the two siblings here! I like seeing more of Whitestag, and fantastic that you wrote about him and Snowflake finding something to bond over. I really like the descriptions of Snowflake too - she really rings true as a wolfish throwback, and it's wonderful to see Whitestag see and appreciate that and be able to interact with her despite it. :)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-06
I love the way Whitestag is being an older brother here, and how he clearly cares for his sister and thinks of her as precious. You really get a sense that he was good at handling her.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-05
It always impresses (and confuses me) to see how strong the wolf blood runs in Quick Fangs veins. Thanks for showing how much more wolf she was as a cub, which makes sense. It was also good to see that not even her brother thought of this as normal, but nevertheless his love to her made him determined to help her find her place in the tribe. Very nice!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-11-30
That was certainly interesting. It's a nice look on the siblings here and I enjoyed the somewhat biased but open look over QuickFang, Whitestage had.
QuickFang sure was an interesting kid, if not easy but I liked seeing how carefully but focused her brother handled her and how sharp (in her own way) QuickFang always was. She might be behind her age in some ways but she diose have a good instinct it seems.

The interaction was great and I just liked the line about Snowfall in there :P
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