Comments on 'Taking Root'

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Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
Oh, this is such aan interesting pair! I really hope that you'll show more of them like this. I like that htey were abel to spend time together without a fight... and that there is such chemistry between tehm. This was so fun to read!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
I just feel like Oliver Twist here, holding out my empty bowl and beggging "More, please!" Seriously. These two? More! Please!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-06
I'm really glad to see more about these two! I like the way their relationship is growing, without it seeming to follow an expected path. Also, kudos here for showing Nightstorm hunting, which isn't something we typically see her do! I definitely look forward to more. :)
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2012-11-05
I really like your descriptive style - the night, the sounds, the feel of the evening, everything just seems to come together so vividly. You really work well with the tension between these two! It's real, and comes across as rather uncomfortable! Which is great, I love when I can get that sort of emotional response from a story. I like the way they keep testing each other's opinions of themselves, and pushing the boundaries of their volatile relationship. :) Sweet ending, and from the title I'm interested in seeing what comes next!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-11-03
I'm happy to see more of these two together! I just love how both of them can be calm one minute, then angry the next, and then end with a tumble in the furs! These two are so unpredictable - I can't wait to see what happens next!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-11-01
Oooooh, I have a knack for such stories. While reading I was so impatient for what will come next: are they going to scratch out each others eyes or will they end in the furs. Happy how it turned out in the end. ;)
They have so differing personalities, I am really curious how they will continue. Will the roots grow?
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-09-24
Oh, I love seeing more of the development between Nightstorm and Thornbow! And I really like that you're taking it slowly =).

It's funny how awkward they are around each other at first, and there's a certain tension between them which you can't really tell which way it will go - attraction or conflict, there's the potential for both.

Really looking forward to seeing how this will continue!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-09-24
It's neat to see this relationship developing. and yeah I love Nightstorm here. She's such a character. I like how she seems always busy in her mind and her coy and sly attitude.

Thornbow seems the opposite to her and it kinda made me giggle how awkward they are around each other at first and there seems to be something between them that is hard to name.

Interest? Fascination? Even a little fear to poke the wrong spot?

I am really intrigued with the two of them and looking forward to read more of them :)
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