Comments on 'A Measure of Security'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-08
|There sure is a whole song and dance to get to the secure places in Underhaven, huh? It's so great to see how different Thumbprint seems to be when alone with Trickleclaw than how she acts out and about with her own kind! She definitely has changed from how she started out when she was younger and encountered the preserver - gone are the days of calling Trickleclaw "specimen" it would seem :)|
New! Entered: 2012-12-16
|You do such a great job of showing aspects of the trolls' world and the security measures. And I'm enjoying reading about the relationship between Thumbprint and Trickleclaw. I hope you will show us more!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-06
|Great glimpse into the trolls' world, which always feels like a peek at something completely different from the world of the elves; more different in a lot of ways than the humans' worlds! I'm also kind of fascinated by the idea that her association with Trickleclaw has worked in subtle ways on Thumbprint herself; or maybe that's just an affinity produced by an innate rebellious streak in her. But her decisions towards the Preserver, and her treatment of it, definitely make her sympathetic.|
New! Entered: 2012-09-18
|I was really wondering what the payoff was going to be. I had it pegged as showing some kind of rivalry between the Tactical branch and the Scribes after the first paragraph but then it quietly switched gears and I was pleasantly surprised.|
New! Entered: 2012-09-17
|Oh, I did not expect that, this relationship between Thumbprint and Tickleclaw. But I like!|
You did a great job in showing all this bureaucracy stuff and the military bearing of the trolls, which is very convincing... and makes this show of affection even more outstanding.
New! Entered: 2012-09-16
|I think, even as bureaucracy-accustomed humans, this level of security is strange! (Unless we maybe have some FBI agents in our midst?) But it is certainly fascinating to see - it never fails to astonish me how highly developed the trolls are. The clock is a very neat detail, too!|
And the friendship between Trickleclaw and Thumbprint is great - I think the effect is made even stronger by the whole mistrust and hurdles Thumbprint has to work through to see it. I really want to see more of them!
New! Entered: 2012-09-14
|I really grow to like the friendship between Tickleclaw and Thumbprint. |
And all the work you put in showing us the security process. Wow. I think we as humans might be more used to this kind of bureaucracy but I can see how it would blow an elves mind. I think this measure of "mistrust" never would occur to them.
And personally I love the clock :) It dose give the trolls once more a very unique feel!
New! Entered: 2012-09-13
|The more I see of Thumbprint, the more I WANT to see! And the layers of security involved her are scary-fascinating... I'm not sure our elves would even comprehend this trollish mindset.|