Comments on 'Greenstone Mountain'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-09
|How nice that the story came to full circle in the end. I really like Lynx and Frost as a couple and Brightwood takes so much after her parents! I really like that she loves the coloured obsidian as much as her mother and the picture make these obsidians look very pretty! I didn't even know till now that coloured obsidian exist! (A shame for an archaeology student, I know...) And I hope the Elves still get to Greenstone Mountain, there must be times, when the humans are not there! It would be a shame to renounce this stone!|
New! Entered: 2014-08-14
|I enjoyed seeing this look at two generations; Lynx and Frost and Brightwood and Farscout. I really liked seeing that Brightwood ended up taking after her mother liking the coloured obsidian, and both sets of lifemates went there when they were pregnant. I was a really loving and warming story.|
New! Entered: 2014-05-07
|Yay! More Frost & Lynx! I love their playful, loving exchanges, and the thought of them 'camping out' on the mountain is really lovely. |
I really like seeing the changes that the humans have brought - and that even though they've changed the territory a little the elves don't have to abandon places entirely. Great to see the echo of the past in Brightwood and Farscout too.
New! Entered: 2012-12-21
|The mirror actions of the two couples was both sad and happy, if that makes sense. It also interesting to get a look at how the elves' routines and traditions have been affected by the arrival of the humans.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
|Oh... this story makes me smile. I appreciated the parallels - the babes in utero, the mothers who love their colored stone, the fathers/Recognizeds who want to make their beloveds happy. :) And all the detail to the story! It is so vivid when I read it.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-15
|That was so romantic! I liked the easy, relaxed pace of this story. No disasters, or drama, just a relaxing day out getting obsidian! I liked how you put in Brightwood's regret at leaving the pretty stones for the humans -- it really makes the reader realize that territory isn't always about roaming space and food availability from prey! And I, too, enjoyed the parallels between the two pairs of lifemates and the two story segments. :)|
New! Entered: 2012-12-06
|The parallel is great, but more than that, the sense of history it creates, showing over how many centuries the elves return to that place, and how even a "practical" errand turns into something to enjoy and share romantically. It makes me wonder if Farscout and Brightwood are aware of the parallel.|
New! Entered: 2012-10-31
|I love how your stories are always chock full of description, from the scenery to the actions of the characters, and it all serves to paint a clear picture in the reader's mind. Nice touch here to parallel Lynx and Frost with Farscout and Brightwood!|
New! Entered: 2012-09-19
|Wonderful story! I always enjoy stories about Lynx and Frost, in this one I liked most to see the lovely camaraderie with those many gestures of affection scattered in between. And of course the end was lovely. Even with all those differences in character Lynx and Farscout do have soemthing in common: their love to their lifemate. *sigh*|
New! Entered: 2012-09-11
|Ohhhh! I like the parallels you draw here between Farscout and Brightwood versus Frost and Lynx. History repeats itself :D It's really touching in a way to be reminded how elves can keep to one certain habit and spot over SO many years and decades even. |
I agree it's nice to see all the details and the mood in this is so nice. Sunny and bright. The feel of labor and work that fulfills.
It was also very sweet to see Lynx and Frost together here. They really came off very likable and alive here. It's always a feast to get a look at elves who formed the tribes history so much.
I really liked the way this turned out.
New! Entered: 2012-09-10
|I'm again impressed by all the details you put in your fics, Whit! I never would have thought about how much work it takes to get to the obsidian ... And it's really nice to get a look at Lynx and Frost before they became parents and everything that came after. The whole scene had a light, easy atmosphere despite the hard work they did here. Lovely!|