Comments on 'Ancient Shadows'
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New! Entered: 2016-01-09
|Rank and status do indeed seem to limit the life of many trolls, in many ways. Not that I think Marl deserves Stillpoint's attention or affection - no one is ever owed anyone's emotions - but it's sad he can't even express his interest due to the difference between their positions in life. A bittersweet moment in troll time!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-06
|This hints at so many great things, like troll social rules and ambitions, but I also like how it gives some characterization to those involved. Marl comes across as a character I'd like to see more of!|
New! Entered: 2012-10-31
|I agree with the other comments - the trolls' way of life is such a sharp contrast to the elves', and it's interesting to see things from the troll point of view once in a while. Even in this short piece I got a strong sense of the characters' personalities - hope to see more of them in the future!|
New! Entered: 2012-09-16
|This was very touching - Marl is such a thoughtful suitor! The fossil is fascinating, and I totally see why Stillpoint loves collecting them. It's great to see how happy the present makes her.|
The society of the trolls just continues to fascinate me. It's sad that in this case, it means that Marl wouldn't stand a chance ...
New! Entered: 2012-09-10
|I recently saw a photo of a very similar fossil to what I describe here, and had been mulling over possible ways to work it into a fic. Then this Treasure Hunt clue arrived in my mailbox and gave me everything I needed! Thank you, Lyn!|
New! Entered: 2012-09-08
|I'm enjoying these troll stories, with their glimpses of a highly caste society that differs so much from our elves. So sweet, Marl waiting for his "payment." Makes me wonder how Stillpoint would react if she knew what he was thinking.|
New! Entered: 2012-09-08
|I love Marl!!!! Sad thing is thatStillpoint is likely oblivious to his true feelings. I like he detail you added to the story and the description of the fossil was fantastic|
New! Entered: 2012-09-07
|I'm so in love with the trolls of River Twine. There is so much you can tell with them you can't tell with elves. New sort of conflichts. |
This was very touching. I found myself very fascinated by the stones myself. I can see why Stillpoint would treasure them. What a thoughtful and attentive "secret) suitor she has here.
I agree. This one felt so alive and the little hints and points that showed how their society works. I never get tried of that!
New! Entered: 2012-09-06
|Wonderful story! You made the trolls and their lives so vivid. I had to grin through the whole story, seeing happy, girlish Stillpoint beore my eyes and a shy, nervous Marl. He was so cute! Guess, love can be difficult in every society.|