Comments on 'Brulavid's Prayer'
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New! Entered: 2014-02-13
|Whoa, what a great look into the ethics and culture of the Fierce Ones, without giving too much details away! Very creepy, in a good way, and the last line explains so much of the behavior we've seen from them without being too on the nose. Fantastic!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-29
|Oh, how cool to read something about the FO's culture! It reminded me a lot of the Vikings, especially the lines about the after life, their version of Walhalla. Most of all I liked that they see their foes as enemys in the real life, but worth of drinking and eating together with in the after life. Speaks of a complex society.|
All in all clever idea you came up with for this clue!
New! Entered: 2012-12-13
|Ooh, chilling! I think you did a great job here of making this just roll out so smoothly that I could imagine a Fierce One warrior saying (or chanting) it as he prepares and paints himself and his horse before riding out! It's also greatly interesting and gives me pause for thought to see them presented in a not-necessarily totally evil sort of way. I mean, yes, of course, evil and cruel acts galore! But the idea of it being religious never actually occured to me for some reason, and I like what you did here.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
|Swooning at this! There is a lot of dramatic, narrative usefulness in the Fierce Ones being these "aliens", whose ways are mysterious and almost incomprehensible to the elves. But I love any chance to see that their culture is based on things that we CAN understand... which isn't the same thing as admiring them. Nice to get this expansion into our knowledge of them.|
New! Entered: 2012-09-10
|Thanks! This is gonna sound strange, but my creative inspiration for this fic was a sourcebook for the Pathfinder role playing game, in which they describe how warriors of their viking-clone culture go into battle singing, and sing throughout the fight. That might still be a fun image to steal for a future fic somewhere...|
New! Entered: 2012-09-06
|I think it's fantastic to get some more depth about the Fierce Ones and their culture... how they live and fight! This is a beautiful prayer/poem.|
New! Entered: 2012-09-06
|Chilly! I do admit I love this one. It has this thick culture feel to it and sounds like a true war prayer before going to the battle. |
Moreso it sounds like a ritual. I really like the sense that the Fierce Ones are more then just brainless barbarians but have a culture they follow and kinda "rules" they live up to. They just happen to be very cruel in our eyes I think.
Lovely take on such a harmless topic as paint and dye!