Comments on 'Death & Dream (AU ending to'

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Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-24
That was very interesting to read! I could totally see Brightwood waking up screaming from this as a nightmare -- one of those "mentally connected to your Recognized/danger sense" sort of things... I was thinking, I bet it must've been fun (in a morbid kind of way) to get to "kill off" your own character... ;)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-21
Stab me in the heart, will you? Damn, but that was action packed and fantastically sad. The last line was gold.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-07
As always, very dramatic and heart-wrenching! And clever to come up with this idea as a way to reference the "death" and "dream" artwork! But I'm glad the story didn't wind up going this way. ;-)
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-06
This would have been an ending I do not appreciate... but nontheless very exiting and nerve-wrecking. Very nice what-if!!
I really liked the describtion of his dying thoughts, which were with his tribe while expecting - and not fearing - the coming end.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-10-31
Yikes, I actually felt scared for Farscout reading this, even though I knew that this wasn't really a part of "First Patrol." And again, reading about him dying was hard even knowing it's AU. Makes me all the more grateful that in the non-AU story, everything turned out all right in the end!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-09-06
When I first read this, I read it as a dream/nightmare that Farscout had during the aftermath of First Patrol. Then I realized it was an AU ending... I am glad that First Patrol didn't end this way!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-09-03
This was very well written and set up very powerful images. I liked the line where Farscout compares the weapon's blade with the hair of his daughter. That's somehow very cutting (pun not intended)

Yet I have to say, that I do not care much for an AU ending to this story. It sure was interesting to read but altogether I like the ending of the original better. Less "heroic" maybe but it in the end it made more sense to me to act that way in the given situation.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-09-03
This was a morbid little exercise, but the AU art did lend inspiration! I rather imagine the Fierce One who gurks my poor laddie here is the third one, who he's lost focus off in the scrum and who's also killed Duskgreeter. If he weren't trying to buy Fadestar time, Farscout totally would have done this differently... ah, well, he achieves his ultimate goal...
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