Comments on 'A Quiet Place to Think'

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Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-08-14
So many parallels, this was so good! This was a lovely look at the thoughts of two men becoming fathers. It made me so happy that they ended up in the same secret place. I loved that Ice's personality seemed to stay consistent with both recognitions. Its was a lovely read.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-21
Oh dear, the parallells were painful (in a good way) between these two. Ice as a Recognized seems like no walk in the park and that the coming cubs should have such misfortune as to get a mother like that and fathers with the fates they had... Sad, but gripping story telling!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
This was very well-written and you made a good use of parallels and contrasts, even down to how their situations are similar, but the fathers themselves are so different.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
This story was something of an exercise in parallels and contrasts for me -- I hope they came through and weren't too subtle! :) For example, since the clue was for them as dying fathers, I wanted to do one of them as expectant fathers (birth vs. death). I also tried to work in some of the specific similarities and differences between them and their relationships with Ice, so I hope that was a success. And as mentioned, the winter/summer thing, too.

Thanks for all the lovely comments everyone! ^_^
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-11
I thought I already commented on this one.
I really liked to see the difference between both men and how they cope with their Recognition of Ice. At the beginning they are pretty alike but while Hawkrunner's thoughts remain dark, I like how Riskrunner embraces the challenge of becoming a father. (Now, I am unhappy that I did not show this in the pic... why isn't Riskrunner smiling??? Arrgh!)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-07
I love the idea that two guys, separated by so many centuries, and both Recognized to the same difficult female, happened to choose the same spot (or a very similar spot) for the same sort of introspection. It's a great link across all that time.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-10-31
That was really neat how you tied both of these Recognitions together with a single place where each father came to think. It was nice to get a glimpse of what each of them might have thought of their impending fatherhoods, especially since both of them Recognized the same lady!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-09-03
It's really cool to see more of Hawkcall and Riskrunner "both in action" here -- I can't help but feel sympathetic for each of them, facing their respective fatherhoods!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-09-02
This was very nice and a clever way to tie this two together I think. I like how this spot seemed to show how different the two of Ice's recognized were and I found it almost symbolic how Hawcall looked over a snowy white landscape when thinking of his fatherhood and Riskrunner looked down into a lush green valley. I know it was just the time of the year but the way you wrote it it seemed almost foreshadowing for Hawkcall.

Loved the characterization of both here and how different they deal with it and yet at some points the same.
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