Comments on 'The Sawtooth's Snap'

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Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-08-14
This was a really cute story. I loved seeing Thistle be a mother, I enjoyed seeing a bit of her parenting style. Turtle's personality in this was great too, I love how he was taught about responsibility to the tribe, and it actually weighed on him. This was a great look into Turtle's early life.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-21
The contrast between success and failure here was great! And children do so easily give up (or at least claim they'll never ever ever do something again) after their first big set-back. Good thing Turtle had encouraging yet firm parents.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-13
Oi, how sweet! Especially together with the pic in which Turtle smiles from one ear to the other.
I really liked you mentioning that elf teenagers are not so different from human teenagers. It is good to see Turtle prersevere in his goal... and, well 12 years isn't quite a short time.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-07
I really like the way this story emphasizes that the fishers are, in their own way, mighty hunters too, and their prey is sometimes just as challenging! Turtle has good reason to be proud. :)
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-10-31
This is a scenario that could have been written with our present-day elves, but I'm glad you decided to pick some ancestors instead. It's nice to see a bit more of the life of Turtle, who I think has only been seen as an adult previously.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-09-09
I love it! Wow, tough love from Thistle, huh? I like how you showed a wolfrider mother isn't always just a mushy pile of kisses and reassurance, but she's still very loving! :D And I have to say, I'm impressed you took a 'simple fish' and used that clue answer to become a rite of passage of sorts for young Turtle! I also loved the notion that fishers are depended on by the tribe, and Turtle's surprise at the concept. :)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-09-06
I love reading about ancestors! What a great idea you had... writing about Turtle, his first experience w/ the Sawtooth and the temptation to give up, and then showing us his success! I think the illustration is great, too!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-09-02
I agree with Whit - it's such a treat to see ancestors we have firmly established as adults in our mind as cubs! I also liked Thistle here a lot, she's firm but loving and finds the right words to encourage her son. And the end is great - a great reminder that the fishers make a valuable contribution to keeping the tribe fed!
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-09-02
This is a lot of fun! Thank for you for another glimpse of the lives of one of our ancestors -- it's really cool to see Turtle as a cub himself, when our primary notion of him so far is as one of Newt's fathers. Very nice!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-09-01
I love this! On so many levels. I like how it shows some of Turtle's personalty and maybe a habit he had that, I think, did stick to him up to the age of an adult. He seems to be one who is easily discouraged but with a good peptalk can do great things.
I also like the End. The feel of triumph years later and that it shows that fishers do a great job as well, feeding the tribe.
And it's always a blast to see the tribe back at different times :D
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