Comments on 'Carving Feathers'
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New! Entered: 2013-05-11
|Great story! I really like seeing Farscout in the mentor role here, and it's touching to see that he'll open up so clearly about his own past to share ideas with Newt. It's great to have the internal thoughts as well; it added a bit of humor to a rather serious conversation. I think it's great to see this "spoken" and that Newt chose Farscout to talk it over with. Wonderful details with the carving too. I like how it tied into the story's theme.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
|I'm one of those people who like stories about crushes that don't work out, where no one is painted as "the mean one". Newt's reasoning is perfectly understandable, as is the pain Otter must feel at his rejection. I hope Farscout's sage advice will help them both.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-16
|I really like Farscout's role of advisor here. My FAVORITE part, though, is reading Farscout's inner thoughts regarding Otter... that Otter is "as transparent as... " made me laugh out loud. |
I also liked reading Newt's inner dilemma. And he seemed to talk more than I'm used to hearing him talk. :) I'm glad he had someone to open up to!
New! Entered: 2012-12-07
|I can completely see why Newt would want to go to Farscout with his problems; he does a great job here of helping Newt work through this difficult issue. His analogy with the bone-carving works really well. (I also kind of like the idea that Newt goes to Farscout because Newt knows that Greenweave is preoccupied with the discovery that Otter is his son; it's a sensitive gesture on Newt's part, since Farscout is much the more neutral party.)|
New! Entered: 2012-08-22
|That was a wonderful moment between the two of them - I really like the relationship between Newt and Farscout, it is so great to see that something from his old life hasn't changed much. And I think Farscout is giving himself too little credit - he's a good person to talk to about problems and a good adviser. I'm glad to see he could ease some of Newt's worries!|
And I agree with Mel, I absolutely adore your descriptions of the elves' daily tasks - such things are what makes a story come really alive!
New! Updated: 2012-08-21
|Wonderful story and definitely an intimate moment. I loved to see how Farscout, despite being the lone wolf, has a knack with giving advice and handling emotional chaos. I was positively surprised, that he confessed his own misery at that age to Newt. Somehow the interaction between those two reminded me lots of how Lynx handled little Briar.|
And tribe gossip? That's a whole new concept to me. Elves doing profane, human things like that? Should stop overestimating them. Haha.
New! Entered: 2012-08-16
|When Melanie was asking about who Newt should talk to, I thought Farscout would be the perfect answer, being someone that he admired and was close to before being wrapped, so I'm glad we get another chance to see that bond still existing between them. I think what really struck me about this story was the way that Farscout brought up the parallels in his own relationship with Brightwood, then pointed out how Newt's situation was different, and was able to relieve some of Newt's worry that way.|
New! Entered: 2012-08-14
|Melanie just handed me this story on a silver platter -- it practically wrote itself! And if you ever have a spare moment, google images of "bone feather jewelry" and take a look at some of the amazing real-world crafting going on out there!|
New! Entered: 2012-08-10
|Whitney, thank you so SO much for this. I can't tell you how amazed I am each time by the fact that you take my little confused ideas and make them into such tight stories. |
I really like what you did here. First of all I really love to see Farscout and Newt interact. The weay Farscout dose reach Newt is different from the way Greenweave dose and I can see why he choose to seek out Farscout here. Not only because it might have opened a whole new can of worms with his foster father.
It's great to see Newt struggling so hard with his feelings here and how calm and patient Farscout reacts to it. Also love how you gave Farscout a task and again give us a little insight into the cravers handywork. Such details really bring the stories to life.
Thanks so much ^^