Comments on 'Losing Father'
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New! Entered: 2016-04-01
|The part where his father is almost going to touch a weeping Mouse... but then doesn't... almost killed me!! Mouse is so sensitive! How could he handle that as a cub when I couldn't handle that as a hard-broiled adult! OMG, gut wrenching!!|
New! Entered: 2014-06-26
|Beetle's "remember all good he's done for and with you"-speech to Mouse stuck with me. It's such a genuine and genius thing to see in this moment, when Bowflight is too lost in his grief to be a decent father. Mouse still shouldn't be left so alone by his father, but it makes Bowflight a very "real" person, reacting this way to the loss of Finch. A very insigtful take on grief from a child's perspective.|
New! Entered: 2013-08-06
|Oh my god, I nearly cried, poor little sweet Mouse. I really loved how his sense for optimism is there though he is so small and sad. |
I really enjoyed Ciders and Beetles appearances, and of course I love seeing Kestrel and Willow with Mouse here.
New! Entered: 2012-12-07
|I feel like we're relatively used to seeing the loss of a lifemate from the point of view of the grieving partner who's left, and we've come to kind of expect that grief to be all-consuming. But this is a great, heart-breaking look at how that grief can so strongly impact others, who are also grieving, and who wind up with a sort of double bereavement. I can't exactly be angry at Bowflight, but poor Mouse's situation really has the greater share of my sympathy.|
New! Entered: 2012-09-02
|I remember trying to decide what to write, and thinking about how Mouse/Pathmark's relationship with his father was still strained, even at the point where Pathmark and Beetle briefly attempted lovemating... Bowflight didn't ever get 100% past his lifemate's death.|
New! Entered: 2012-08-12
|This left me all kinds of feeling raw and sad. I felt very angry at Bowflight here. I mean I understand his loss and all that but it just leaves me to want and shake him until he at least dose something. I have a faint idea what his problem might be but still.... no free sympathy pass for this behavior toward a child. |
The grief and worries of Mouse were very heart-wrenching. I wonder if we will learn at least if and how this was solved again in some other story.
New! Entered: 2012-07-24
|*sniff* Poor, little cub!!! I feel so sorry for him. Can't imagine how this must be like but you made a great job in already showing his optimistic side. Despite his sorrow he is easily convinceable that his father will come back one day, the hope returns to him quickly. |
I wonder if Mouse will held a grudge against him for a while... but can`t imagine even that.