Comments on 'Parting Gift'
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New! Entered: 2015-02-09
|This story is so bittersweet, and the impact you've given it with so few words is absolutely stunning to me. I'm happy for Doeskin, but I really loved this pairing, and I'm sad to see it end.|
New! Entered: 2014-01-18
|Very touching. It's a very unusual time to offer a soul name, and it makes me wonder about future rendezvous between Doeskin and One-Leg, and if this will just be kept quietly between them. It's a very sweet sentiment juxtaposed with the ending of a (promised) relationship - and somehow so perfectly sweet. What kinder way to part, then by happily sharing your most personal gift, your soul? I think it really speaks to how trusting and caring these two are, that this could seem so appropriate at that time.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-24
|I really love the tranquility and closeness of this story. Lovely feel to the whole thing, and I love how you opened the story and closed it with soulnames -- and how One-Leg phrased his reply. :) Beautiful to think that they parted on such good terms, and One-Leg could even still woo her aftwerward.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-16
|I so appreciate us seeing this moment in their relationships. That she would share her soul name as a parting gift... and that he would reciprocate in reminding her of himself. I especially like that he understands her decision and that he accepts it while still planning to try to woo her... :) Go, One-Leg!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-10
|It's great to see this moment set down, because in many ways, it's a puzzling situation -- hard to believe that Doeskin could choose Ringtail over One-Leg, when we know One-Leg so much better and thus appreciate his qualities. But this touches very convincingly on the idea that the dynamics of sharing soul-names and of Recognition aren't always predictable, and it's something the elves must deal with the best way they can.|
New! Entered: 2012-10-27
|I do love it when stories explore the use of sending, and soul names in particular; that way of communication sets elves so very much apart from humans, in how they can interact with each other and here it truly reflected how it influences the elves' way of life. Also a nice look into One-Leg's head :)|
New! Entered: 2012-08-07
|As Whitney said. I am so amazed in how you are able to put so much in so little text. Within that few words, that glimpse I got such a strong feel for the relationship between Doeskin and One-Leg but also one for the relationship between Doeskin and Ringtail. |
I like that and I like how much this is showing us who One-Leg is and how he rolls.
New! Entered: 2012-07-30
|Oh, this was lovely! Like Whitney said, this goes to show that less often means more. And what an unusual way to share a soul name! I found it really touching, and I loved how readily One-Leg accepted it. A wonderful moment!|
New! Entered: 2012-07-18
|::swooning:: Chris, you make an art of the old phrase "Less means more." This is just a eviscerating heartbreak of a scene, but you sell it so very well!|
New! Entered: 2012-07-11
|Wow, the shortness of this story makes it even more intense, somehow. Even readers who are not familiar with the past circumstances will be touched, I am sure of that.|
My first thought while reading was: how mean of Doeskin to do that, offering something so precious. This must make One-Leg even more longing for her. Than you surpised me with OLs understanding, the peaceful acceptance... I must admit, I adore him for that.
Wonderful, wonderful snippet!!