Comments on 'Mixed-Up Drunk'

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Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-04-14
Interesting development regarding Newt's feelings, and great family interaction (drunken as it was). Longshot seems to be a very friendly drunk - always amusing to watch people try to deal with those sort of people (as long as it's in a story instead of real life, then it's a thorn in the tail to get them home and into bed).
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-12-16
This was fun to write, and I found the family interaction in the beginning a lot of fun! We don't really see that grouping together, relaxing, very often!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-10
It's nice to see Newt put in what amounts to the "adult" position here -- having to take care of an older tribemate. It feels like a small rite of passage, in which he starts stepping into a more adult role, instead of being the small, orphan child that everyone cares for. It nicely hints at his developing herbal-healer role, too.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-07-18
I was surprised to see Newt running to get indoors before sunlight -- I guess I'd never realized he was THAT worried about exposure to sunlight? I'll have to remember that for future use!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-07-06
That was a very nice little story. I really enjoyed the family interaction the most, I have to admit - it's so nice to see them all together, feeling comfortable around each other. Plus, the image of them all being pretty drunk is rather amusing :p. Nice interaction with Newt, too, it's good to see some backstory for his feelings for Longshot ^^.
Laura Melis
New! Entered: 2012-07-03
I cracked up as I imagined what Longshot must have sounded like.....intoxication is a strange thing.....wonder what happened to those berries....
What a great fit to the illustration. Just as I imagined it, well, with way more detail and captivation. ;)
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-07-03
Good to see a story for this pic. I've already imagined this kind of scenario and you put it very well. Most of all I enjoyed the family get-together at the beginning.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-07-02
Thanks for this Lyn. ^^ I have to say What I enjoyed most of this story is the interaction between Longshot his parents and their company in the start. It's nice to see them so comfortable around each other.
Poor Longshot. The berries really got the better of him there. Good that Newt was nearby to pick him up.
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