Comments on 'Daydream Believer'
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New! Entered: 2012-12-21
|I had wondered what the exact origin of Dreamflight's name was. This was an adrenaline surge if I ever had one; the description of the fall gave me vertigo :)|
New! Entered: 2012-12-10
|I love how dramatic this is, because it's a different kind of drama than we've associated with Dreamflight to date -- yet, it also nicely ties into that later familial drama, I think, because it demonstrates that her tendency to be self-centered and impulsive goes back for a LONG way. The moment of her leap is simply shocking, since it really should have ended in her death, and it's fascinating to think that her desire to fly was so strong that she was willing to bet her life on it... though of course, one suspects that she mostly didn't think about that aspect too hard. Really key insights into the character!|
New! Entered: 2012-09-08
|O such a powerful story! You can feel Dreamflight's yearning to fly, and the pull to foolishness. It's a good thing Kestrel was there to save her!|
New! Entered: 2012-08-10
|I gotta say, that this was till now the most interesting story I read about Dreamflight. Again Whitney I bow my head before you. There are so many little things in this. |
I love the start. I always like it if y story tosses you right into the action.
Also love how strongly Kestrel reacted and I like that you brought up the overuse of magic. It's so often forgotten or ignored that magic has it's limits. We all love to think of it as some kind of power that has no limits or repercussions.
The interaction between Honey, Greenweave and their daughter was great as well. It's neat to see them AS a family. The argument s and reactions were very real. Especially Honey was portrayed greatly here.
I love to see this explored. What did stand out to be in that talk was how often both Honey and Greenwave said that you can't wish things into existence, no matter how hard you want it. That kinda made me think how ironic it is that it comes from exactly those two.
Dreamflight's utter thick headed attitude here was very striking and I love how she was so "But that's how it works, damm it!"Use your stories responsibly :P
New! Entered: 2012-07-18
|Merry deserves the credit for this story! She looked at Dreamflight's CIS and pointed out that the character's original story hook AND the source of her tribal name -- that Dreamflight yearned to fly! -- had disappeared from Dreamflight's character sheet! I don't know when or even why that was purged, since it's one of the more interesting elements of Dreamflight's personality! I'd really look forward to seeing more in the future of how an elf deals with NOT developing a magic talent that they really, really, REALLY want!|
New! Entered: 2012-07-06
|That was a great piece of backstory - and a really exciting one, too! The first part had me gasping in fear, even though I knew it would be okay in the end. But Dreamflight is really stubborn here, and it made me wonder if she still is hoping to fly some day (after all, Willow's magic surfaced pretty late, too).|
Also, it was pretty interesting to see our level-headed eldest-elder get angry, and I really liked having a look at Greenweave and Honey as parents (before things went bad)!
New! Entered: 2012-07-03
|This was really interesting. It really filled in the gaps I had about some of the characters involved and really showed me what Holt life was like back then with the different mix of characters and events. Thanks for sharing.|
New! Entered: 2012-07-02
|Well, that is definitely a suitable name. Thanks for providing this background information. Seems Dreamflight has always been like this. ;) Although I must admit her arguments and the way she defended herself reminded me more of a nearly teenager than of an 18 years old.|
It was also very interesting to see how a magic user can overstrain herself and how it affects the body. I was not aware of that (or just forgot).