Comments on 'Those Left Behind'
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New! Entered: 2016-08-08
|I loved the dandelion analogy! So fitting! And yeah, crafting IS boring!! I couldn't even finish a simple cross-stitch so I know how someone as vibrant as Willow could feel. But now that they are so few, every little thing matters!|
New! Entered: 2014-09-30
|I'm re-reading the whole Gathering Storm storyline (and will comment on all the rest of it, worry not ;)) but this one stopped me in particular because I always really enjoy descriptions of crafting and the elves' everyday work. And you've struck a really satisfying balance here between this sense of quiet business, this pleasant industriousness really, with all of them sitting together and working - and the tension of the circumstances that's in pretty much every word they say. All the smiles are grim and the way it's all peppered with descriptions of the winter really drives the atmosphere home. Willow is a great choice for perspective on this particular scene, since this is so relevant to her own life - her change in role from someone who rides out to someone who's got to come to appreciate how much work there is to do at home and how important that work is (I caught the little hint of Copper's magic, there!) |
And there is also the strong sense of community, although it's a little sad, too, since it's such a reduced one... but it lets us feel the connection between those elves who, other than being crafters, don't get seen interacting all that much. It's good to think, on this subject, that the cubs here got from this experience this really powerful idea of the importance of the mundane crafting work that gets done while "adventure" happens elsewhere. Even if Rill doesn't take it to heart!
New! Entered: 2014-09-30
|There's a great sense of waiting throughout this fic. I really like how they'll all preparing, and obviously in fear of the worst, but bound together with a forceful hope and silence over their worries. It's a really interesting interaction, it makes me think of what a more "normal" winter would be like, if there'd still be so many gathered together or if the extra bodies would help them break off into smaller, more isolated groups. Great look at the different interactions too; I love seeing the cubs together like this, especially with the backdrop of some very different adult personalities as well.|
New! Entered: 2014-02-19
|I just commented on one of the installments of The Gathering Storm how much I enjoyed the period peeking in on what the members back at the holt are doing... and here's a whole fic devoted to the subject! I love it! I really enjoyed this look into the crafting side of life at the holt.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-10
|I was really happy to see in this fic the "crafting" aspects of the tribe given center stage. So much of their survival depends on all of those tasks, performed carefully, and with skill, so that what they make is reliable for those who will use it. It's not the most glamorous work, but it's just as necessary as the more "heroic" tasks, and it's great to see it shown in detail.|
New! Entered: 2012-08-06
|I really like this one. It's such a great look on what our crafters do for the tribe. I liked the image of the scattered seed as well and the feel of the first part. It was very well handeled and I could sense the feel of an empty holt and how weird and "false" it must feel to Willow. |
And I love the mood and feel of the second part in the Gathering Den. The busy work, and how the mood is pressing down while everyone seems in their own thoughts but tries to keep the good spirit up.
Loved to see some of those we don't see often together and I really liked to see them interact and work together. I agree that Willow's POV was very well chose here to get the crafting closer to us. I think most people think like her. Crafting is necessary but kinda dull. It's neat to see how important a work it actually is.
(Also liked the subtle drop of Coppers magic if it was that)
Love the mood and the details but especially the atmosphere you created with this.
New! Entered: 2012-07-18
|Thank you Sofia! My inspiration for this entire fic was just the image of someone blowing on a dandelion head, and seeing those little seeds fly off! That and the common misperception that hunters are so sexy, and being a crafter is boring because you just sit at home making stuff. The tribe would freeze to death without its crafters, and the hunters would have nothing to hunt with! In a low tech survival situation like this tribe lives in, I'm rather of the opinion that it can't be an either/or situation. Practically everyone in the tribe should be capable and able to do both, and the folks who ONLY hunt should be looked down on for not fully contributing their fair share to the needs of the tribe. Food for thought, maybe...|
New! Entered: 2012-07-08
|This was a great look at those who stayed behind - I especially liked how you created such a real, tangible atmosphere. And it showed so well how the tribe gets closer together in a time of crisis. I also really liked Willow's POV and seeing how she comes to discover the value of crafting and her own patience.|
New! Entered: 2012-07-06
|Thanks for writing this, Whit! I like how you've shown the more patient side of Willow -- it does exist, although she usually doesn't show it ;) I also like how you've shown that everyone has a desire to be closer to one another during these difficult circumstances and that the Holt is really one big family. Thanks again!|
New! Updated: 2012-07-01
|Loved to see how the elves left at the Holt deal with the situation. I could really feel the silence and melancholia that had settled on the den trees with so many gone.|
It is good to see that they have struggles on their own with dwindling supplies and too few hands. It's a hard time for all of them.
New! Entered: 2012-06-28
|Having Willow's POV dominate the story made it easy for me as a reader to follow her in the "discovery" that crafting is the backbone of the Holt. A very fitting discovery, times being what they are at this point on the timeline. It was interesting to see what those left in the Holt were up to, when the rest of the elves where scattered all over. The way Willow likened it to being split like flowerseeds for the wind captured that feeling beautifully!|
New! Entered: 2012-06-27
|I appreciate this piece of the picture so much - I really think it's harder for those left behind, wondering what's going on. And I really like how everyone gathers together in one place, not really wanting to be alone. Willow's new resevoir of patience is touching; and I always enjoy glimpses of Copper's magic!|