Comments on 'Listen to the Thunder'

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Ally Raidel
New! Entered: 2014-02-17
Yikes... poor Chicory and Rainpace. That's a heck of a thing to have to explain to a child, especially when there's danger in the air and the atmosphere is so tense. The last thing you want to do is break their little bubbles when things are already bad enough... I love how matter of fact-ly Rainpace explains the truth. Neither of them try to shelter her from reality, just from danger.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-23
The anticipation was very well portrayed here. I could feel Rainpace's worry. Crackle's story making a reapperance was a nice touch. Poor Rainpace and Chicory, having to ruin her hope like that; though I think it was the right thing to do, otherwise Glow might not have taken the situation seriously.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
Great heavy atmosphere here! But my favorite thing about this story is Glow. In contrast to the other children in some of the other stories in this sequence, who pick up on the adults' distress and are anxious themselves, I liked seeing a little kid resort to things like a fantasy explanation, and unquestioning faith in the word of someone older, as reassurance. That felt very real to me.
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-08-15
I really feel for Rainpace and Chicory here - I don't think any parent wants to tell their child that something they believe in isn't true. I have to agree with Glow and Chicory, though...Crackle's story is better! I have to say that the illustration to this story fits the overall tone very well.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-07-18
My inspiration for this fic was HBO's "Deadwood" scene, in which Wild Bill Hickock urges a Victorian lady in an Old West mining camp to use her common sense and get herself out of a dangerous situation (youtube link here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kmYdYti-obg) I just have always LOVED that scene, and had rather imagined I'd steal the imagery for a Farscout fic someday. When this opportunity came along though, it wrote itself!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-07-11
I'm so glad I could illustrate this one together with Viki. Through it was hard to get all the atmosphere you created into a single picture.
Anyhow. I really like the atmosphere here. The sorrow is there, so heavily pressing on them like a brewing storm. omehow Glow's cheerful and naive ignoranz is almost making it harder.
As other's said it's good to see Rainpace and Chicory as such wise parent. They both matured a lot over the time I am in this holt. And of course I like it how there are links to other stories :) In this case the stuff Crackle put together about Lynx. It's good to see how such little things have consequences that show up here and there.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-07-11
It's great to see the reactions of the individual tribe members to the Fierce Ones' return! The atmosphere is really great here, and the thunderstorm fits perfectly into it. Glow is so cute, and it's always great to see Crackle's stories having consequences. I liked how gentle and patient Rainpace and Chicory are in explaining to Glow what the situation is like - great look at them being parents during a very difficult time!
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-06-24
Oh, I have so been waiting for this to get posted on-site! Yay! I truly love this short story. :) Glow is a little bright spot of irrepressable child-minded hope in a too-dark situation. Poor Rainpace and Chicory! No parents should be in the position of not being able to tell their child she is safe. =( That must be very difficult, which you showed well. I like the way the parents, especially Rainpace, responded to their cub's fantastic notions with gentle logic while trying also not to needlessly frighten her. Of course, that does not in any way stop *them* from being frightened!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-06-18
Thank you once again, Whit, for this beautiful story! You perfectly captured the dark mood Rainpace and Chicory are in and I loved to see this family scene in general.
Glow is adorable here and I am not so sure if she will give up her believe in Crackle's story completely.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-06-18
Beth already put it so well....

I like the feel of the story, and how the weather fits what is happening. I also *love* Glow's innocence. What's interesting is that Glow didn't then take this one step further to realize that Copper's story was true!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2012-06-16
Lovely story! Such a great scene, and I love that Crackle's stories have longer consequences. You really make it too easy to feel Rainpace & Chicory's pain at having to explain the truth to little Glow. Very atmospheric, and unsettling, despite the comfy setting.
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