Comments on 'Patience and Fire'
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New! Entered: 2014-12-30
|Suddendusk is such a good father! I loved the interaction between him and his son! Rill is a little whirlwind at it was fun to see, that he remember Suddendusk a bit of himself. Overall was it a really interesting story, I learned a bit myself about firemaking. And the last sentence from Rill had me laughing out loud!|
New! Entered: 2014-12-04
|Aw, I just love to see Suddendusk being a father. It is interesting to think that Rill might be a crafter like his father someday - for some reason I hadn't pictured that but I could see it working! The last line is so cute :3|
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
|This is such a great look at the father-son dynamic, with Suddendusk playing to his strengths, and also figuring out a way to engage Rill's scattershot attention. I love the work that I know went into figure out something that they could be shown doing, and how well it's conveyed. I definitely learned something about fire-making myself!|
New! Entered: 2012-07-18
|Yeah! I loved Rill's last words in this fic, and the interplay between father and son as Suddendusk teaches his son is just lovely! I love seeing our crafters at work like this!|
New! Entered: 2012-07-15
|Aww, this was very cute. I love Rill's eagerness to learn even if his obvious lack of concentration is making it hard for him. He's a clever lad, and I'm curious if he will indeed become a crafter one day.|
It's a very nice father and son moment - I really liked how Suddendusk explained everything, it was very well understandable. And the ending was very sweet and funny. The last line made me laugh :).
New! Entered: 2012-07-11
|D#awwwww. I remeber learning that on a camping trip with my judo-club. That was a pretty good description. I bet you could copy the "experiment" with a little patience ^^ |
I liked the characterization of Rill here. His hunger for something to do and how he tries to keep focused but you can sense it's a hard task for him.
A nice little Father and Son moment. Also liked the call backs on earlier inventions of Suddendusk and his eagerness to show his son interesting thing.
And I appreciated the sense of Rill inducing Windsong in his last statement. It was just a mentioning but it gave the impression she's as much part of his life as his family in blood (or I am just eager to read it into it :P )
New! Entered: 2012-07-05
|What a sweet father-son-moment... with an end that made me smile. Suddendusk is such a good father. I would like to see more of this.|
New! Entered: 2012-06-19
|ha ha ha ha... "I learned to be patient today." I wish it were that easy. :) This story is so vividly detailed, I think I could go out and try what Suddendusk taught Rill. :) Thank you... I like reading about this father-son moment!|