Comments on 'Shared Burdens'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-07-14
If anything will calm Cloudfern down, it will be the knowledge that Willow gave Beetle her soul name so she can pull her back from the brink if things get crazy. After all, Cloudfern knows all about soul names!! (Lifemate, Recognized, Child, Soul Brother...)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
Kudos to both of you for the way you did this story! Like others, I really appreciated that it was a careful, thoughtful look at why a pair of elves might decide to exchange soulnames, and it was undertaken with appreciation for everything that such a decision entails. I liked that it was done in response to everything that went down with Willow, and that it pointed out an anchor that she just doesn't have, and why she might want that anchor. And I really liked that it wasn't reciprocal, and that it was as much difficult as it was uplifting. Great job!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-07-22
This was a wonderful, touching story. Like Mel, I have to admit that I'm rather tired of the cliché of soul names being exchanged (not because of how it has been handled here so far but elsewhere), and so I really appreciated seeing the amount of thoughts and care that went into this. It's very clear that it's a hard decision, and I especially liked that it was not reciprocal. My favourite bit was probably that Willow felt exposed and naked after having giving it, which felt very real and understandable to me.

It's really great to see the two being so close together and finally opening up to each other about some things - they both were keeping back things in order not to burden the other, which is understandable but a bit sad. So I do hope they will share their burdens more often, now! And I'm looking forward to seeing how they will deal with Cloudfern and his anger.

And I really loved the little touch of Willow interpreting the human word as "beloved" and claiming it for Beetle :)!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-07-16
As all others before I also like most the way how the name is given. It is pretty unique and very believable. I am also happy that Beetle did not do so in return. It's a promise for more good stories to come in the future.
Melanie D.
New! Updated: 2012-07-10
I have to admit, I couldn't go into this story without a preconceived bias. Which has in no way to do with you guys or anything but that the exchange of sounlanes by choice came to be kind of a cliché within the EQ community and one I sadly grew really tried of. Anyway I tried my best to go onto this story with an open mind. As much as it is possible I guess ^^' However I found myself suprised. In this case it was something that seemed to have build up a lot with what had happend. It was unconventionel but it was not for "Oh so pure love" but more like a safty rope and it was made extra clear that this isn't an easy task for either of the two. Neither the one who get's the name nor for the one who gives it away. This is mostly what I miss in the Clisheé that it became. That it is not like giving someone you love ythe key to your appartment but your very soul!

First of all I had to smile a little realizing that Beetle in the first scene has a similar role as Greenweave play with her father when he has nightmares. She was there supporting and comforting.
Also nice to see how Beetle and Willow (and to an extent Cloudfern) all kept things from each other because they worried to burnedn the other. It's such a real thing and so hard to come by. I did like the atmosphere in the story. Willow seemd kind of ... intropective. Even as a reader you could clearly see that she's carring a lot and dosn't speak openly to Beetle, which dose make you empazise with the worry Beetle feels.

It's nice to see the two together and forming such a strong bound. It will be interesting to see the meet up with Cloudfern and right now I miss a few more stories seeing Cloudfern dealing with the problem from his side. I feel Beetle and Willow might not be fully aware what really is going on in Cloudfern while Greenweave and maybe Newt know more of it.
There is the interesting parallel to the nightmares again. Too bad I know you guys are already working on this ... I'd have loved to get something in.

(OMG- Sorry for the long rambling comment here O.o )
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-06-26
Willow and Beetle's developing relationship is so interesting! I love how you made the not-mutual soul-name sharing a way for Willow to sleep calmly and the inclusion of the human word for beloved was a wonderful touch. Now I have to go finish "Forgotten Regrets" so that colab/sequel to this can be written ;)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-06-19
Thanks, Whit.... This story was a while in the making. I think it will be interesting to see what kind of relationship dynamics this makes for....
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-05-31
My favorite thing about this story is that the soul-name trade is not recipercol. And it's not a typical "here, I'm going to hand you my name out of pure love and that now you'll be better, forever" situation, either. You've taken hoary old fandom standard and done something different with it -- bravo to you both!
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