Comments on 'Outrageous Fortune'
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New! Entered: 2015-02-05
|The snippets out of the troll-society are always interesting! They are more like humans in more than one way. Their politics are very interesting and so are the intrigues. But poor Redpike! Fortunately he has his wife which still loves him, no matter what!|
New! Entered: 2015-01-29
|Short, but gets the story across. This is why I never want to get into politics, too many deals being made, too many lies being told, lives too easily destroyed. I feel bad for Redpike, he clearly feels a responsibility to his wife.|
New! Entered: 2014-04-13
|Awwww, now I feel sad for poor Redpike. Excellent way of showing his and Bladesong's relationship in only a few words!|
New! Entered: 2014-04-07
|Oh, that's painful and tender and beautiful all over. It really captures that sense of quiet dignity and hurt pride. Wonderful work with emotion - I'm really cheering for Redpike and Bladesong now.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-13
|Oh my, the end ist just great! Did not expect so much love between Trolls (does it get obvious that I have prejudices against Trolls? ;) ). Seems treasures are not everything.|
It was also - again - a nice insight into Troll society.
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
|In stories like these, where you see Redpike with his loving wife (who you've made into a really sympathetic character), and remember that he is a family troll, with responsibilities to a wife and child... you can almost forget the reason his fortunes tumbled! And it was a reason we the reader have to be somewhat sympathetic with... but stories like this make me feel sympathetic for him, too. I like that you've done that, rather than just making him an all-purpose bad-guy.|
New! Entered: 2012-07-02
|This is glorious! I love every line here Chris. The moment is chosen so well and I love how this short bit shows the political implications and ways here. The feel to this story is gerat and it tells us so much in so little. |
And most of all I love how strong the bound of Redpike and his wife come off here even if she's barely mention but with all the set up from before it's clear to see why he feels ashamed. He was on his way up and see how fast that can change. Well done. I love it.
New! Entered: 2012-06-20
|I like the intricacies, and how stories about the trolls are already so woven together - keep it up! I want to see more. And I'd love to see what happens if Redpike ever traces "what went wrong" back to the one who "started" it.|
New! Entered: 2012-05-31
|This is short but sweet (or rather -- heartbreaking!). You're really capturing the political structure (and its impact on individual members of the community) that makes the trolls at River Twine so darn interesting! (And potentially so much more FUN than the elves...)|