Comments on 'Angry and Unreasonable'

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Ingrid G.
New! Updated: 2016-07-12
Even though the elves are telepathic, it really adds another complication to relationships. Sometimes you DON'T want the other person to know how you feel because you will either be way too vulnerable or you will hurt the other person. "Send it" is now "Truth or Dare"!

Cloudfern is on the surface totally unreasonable, but I can see why he'd react that way.

And poor Beetle! Well she's not the first to be caught between two "in-laws" and she won't be the last!!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-08-30
The opening paragraphs really made me just want to go and snuggle Cloudfern. Poor traumatized guy, I had all the sympathy for him. And then he goes and lashes out at his daughter like that. Wow. The title definitely fits. It's hard to really excuse behaviour like that though, what a tangled situation! Great way to show his side of things though, and just how under his skin things are.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-16
I always like seeing Cloudfern step out from his assigned role as the loving, caring, always happy healer who is just beautiful face and hair. If I was Beetle I would have slapt him for his comment about Willows scent.
I really feel for her here. It is so difficult when parents and lovemate do not get along.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
What I really liked about this story was that it's a look at how the elves can still fail to understand each other, even though they have methods for communication at their disposal that we humans don't. Even though they have sending, that still doesn't mean they will always be perfectly in tune with each other -- there are still ways they can fail to connect. I like that; it would be boring, otherwise. ;-) Still, I look forward to seeing Beetle and Cloudfern -- and Cloudfern and Willow someday! -- reconciling, since it's painful to see loved ones fighting.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-07-02
Lyn, I think you did a good job in prortaying how one can KNOW that they are unreasonable and still are helpless in feeling RIGHT about it. CCloudfern's anger is very well understood by me as is Beetle's. I still got the feeling that Beetle is unreasonable as well, so don't worry that you didn't get this across.
For once Beetle's ability to focus on the positive plays to her disadvantage by understanding her father. I still can see why she's hurt that much. She's torn between her father and her lover. Bioth father and daughter went through things the other didn't see and feel. It makes it hard to understand the other side, especially with all the emotions flying around.

I thought this was very well written too. It also made me wonder how Greenweave and Newt who both were closer to Cloudfern's misery over the time reacted on this fight escalating. (It always makes me imagine that Newt might be scared as well. He only got told how sore things went after his warping such a fight among family might bring up fear within him as well)

It will be nice to see how this will go on.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-06-26
There is so much passion and painful misunderstandin in this story! I really feel for both of them and rereading this has inspired me to go work on "Forgotten Regrets", so we can get the colab story underway soon :D
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-06-19
I think what I didn't/couldn't show is that they are both a little unreasonable here... Beetle's stuck in her own opinion as much as Cloudy's stuck in his opinion/emotions. Don't worry, though... a follow up to this will be in the works sometime in the near (I hope) future.
Tone Strand
New! Entered: 2012-06-08
There is this thing with sending... how one can send the emotions rushing through your veins, instead of explaining with words. When you use the voice, it sounds more raw. I usually rush things way too much when telling people how I feel, and fold just so easily. Writing it down helps one find the better way to express oneself, or at least for me, but again, things are lost. Or I'll manage to turn it to myself, say I'm just selfish and try to end my point before that happens.

But sending is so intimate, and one would probably have problems letting ones guard down. There are some things you just can't share, which I think this story really shows. How Cloudfern is carrying this anger and fear, causing to lash out. We usually do, don't we?
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