Comments on 'Mine'
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New! Entered: 2015-12-11
|I know you can't put human emotions into wolves, but the romantic movie-writer part of me wonders if any of Charm's cubs even recognized her as "Mother". It would be neat to have one moment in time when she is surrounded by all her cubs! ... Having a wolf bond must be harder than having a pet! Having them free to live their own lives, however painful!|
New! Entered: 2014-08-09
|I like the comparison between Farscout and True Edge and how they're very different scouts. True Edge losing himself in the Now to dull loneliness as well as focus his mind was a nice contrast to Farscout's enjoyment of being on his own for a while.|
The "politics" of elf-blooded wolves are always fascinating to read about. While Elfquest was written during a time where the alpha-beta-gamme-omega theory for wolves was popular, so it's understandable that the wolves there challenge each other left and right, with harsh consequences, since that theory was disproven I've had the theory that it's the elf-blood in them that make them so set on "pack rank".
The wolf-blood sure changed the High Ones and how they live, so it would only make sense that elf-blood drastically change wolf behaviour, even though they still are in their original habitat.
Charm's story was very touching and it was interesting to see how she didn't slink away and wilter after being pushed out of the pack. Getting a look inside True Edge's head is also great; he's often shown being a bit more in the Now than other elves in River Twine, so comparing him to the wolves was a nice contrast.
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
|It was a great idea for you to do this story as a close look at the bond between elves and their wolf-friends. We sometimes see it at the point of bonding, and we sometimes see them acting as a team, but this was a great extended amount of time spent really focusing on one pair and their partnership. It adds a lot to the world, and is a great reminder of how central the bond between wolf and elf is to our wolfriders.|
New! Entered: 2012-07-02
|I liked the gentle and calm pacing here. It all had such a "moment in time" feel to it, which is fitting given the nature of the story, I think. |
I only can agree with what the others said already. It's good to see parts of the packs live and society. You once again brought up things I didn't think of, such as: Omega will get into their heat as well. It's kinda neat to see this handled, and to see what consequences it had. The idea of a litter within the litter of cubs is an interesting one.
It's also nice to see how TrueEdge shows his wolf sides but his elf sides too, which differ sometimes only in subtle details. I thought that he kept an eye out on who Charm's cubs were was somehow very touching.
The end was so sober and yet it made me feel a little melancholic. It seems so clear that Charm and TrueEdge will part soon, but I sense there is a new bound in reach as well.
Love the subtle tones here very much.
New! Entered: 2012-06-18
|I'm glad to see a story on Charm's litter! And all the pack dynamics, and how TrueEdge interferes in his own way, to help his wolf-friend.|
New! Entered: 2012-05-04
|I, too, like the relationship portrayed here. I liked that True Edge is 'wolfy' enough to realize that what Charm is going through, while it won't be accepted, is not The Way. However, he's also 'elfy' enough to stay by his wolf's side when she needs his support.|
New! Entered: 2012-05-01
|I like how this story explores the nature of the relationship between the elves and the wolves. How the wolves are not pets, but companions. I love how True Edge understands that Charm needs to do things that make sense to her, whether they are logical or not, and how he watches out for her when she has to live with the consequences.|
New! Entered: 2012-04-29
|That was a great look at the pack life, and I enjoyed learning more about Charm. Poor wolf, though, it must be hard to be close to the pack but not part of it. Good to know that True Edge is watching out for her! I especially liked the description of the patrol, too, and how True Edge enjoyed being out and about with his wolf friend.|