Comments on 'Sun and Moon'

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Tah-marien F.
New! Entered: 2014-02-26
This was my first story from Crackle; how fitting that Laura wrote it.

But Newt stands out here more for me. He IS a different form of beautiful. And I thought the story pointed that out while also giving him a look at how someone could see that beauty as special.
I do like the nickname.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
I love Crackle's stories! They always end up affecting the elves listening, which always lead to interesting reactions to read about. I like the effect of the "fading" argument at the end.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-08-14
I loved both the over-story showing all the cubs' and teens' interactions, and the under-story that Crackle concocted -- loved Newt's knowing admonishments of her NOT to tell a scary story (which she is apparently incapable of). The story itself is neat, and so beautifully illustrated. I really kind of loved that raccoons were the "bad guys" in it -- it seems like not an immediately obvious choice, but I concur, raccoons are spooky!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-06-19
--did-- :)
I really enjoyed reading this. I found myself caught up in Crackle's tale and believing it... I mean, aside from the fact that there's a story about Newt's birth, there's no real way to know that the story about the Moon-Cub isn't true :) I think "Moon-Cub" suits Newt... except... he's not a cub any more, as we can tell by Crackle's blush.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-04-21
Finally get to comment on this :)
Thank you so much for this story in a story Laura- It was such a joy and treat when you sent this to me. As I told you I had a similar idea but it was not half as good as this one.
It's nice to see Crackle in her role as a storyteller here and I love the idea behind the story. It weaves together the paleness and the sensitiveness toward the sun of Newt so nicely.
Makes me wonder how long the kiddies here will be convinced that he IS the moon-cub out of the story and I can see how this might stick as a teasing-lovingly nickname between Crackle and him.

Also love the bits of interaction between Crackle and Fadestar here, and the slight hints at Crackle's view of Newt. I really wonder what's going on in her during this event.

Oh and.. - Did too!
Laura Melis
New! Entered: 2012-04-17
---did not....

*heh-heh* Thanks for your comments. Crackle's an imaginative type.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-04-16
What a great story! I love seeing Crackle shine in her role as a story teller, and it's funny that she seems to be unable to tell a story that's not scary at all ^^. Poor Newt felt a bit mocked, though, it seems - good that he didn't stay angry for long! I wonder a bit if this hints at Crackle having a bit of a crush here, what with her calling him beautiful and all :p.
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