Comments on 'And Whether Fish Have Wings'
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New! Entered: 2016-05-28
|Notch and Beetle were super close when she was a kid! My favorite part was when she almost cried and it had happened before so he knew he had to comfort her right away! The story was a cross between Native American Mythology and Aesop. Love it!|
New! Entered: 2014-02-26
|I am surprised Beetle survived her cubhood with a big trickster for an older brother like Coyote aka Notch.|
You can see the love here and I just adore the descriptions of her little hands and open expressions.
New! Entered: 2012-12-23
|Awwwww, I love it! This reminded me so much of a Just-So Story. :D Coyote has a wonderful imagination, and little Beetle with her curiosity makes the perfect audience to his stories! Poor Coyote when he panicked about making her cry -- I think anyone who has ever told a story to a small child off the top of their head can identify with his quick thinking in his "but then it was okay because!" moment. It's a fine line to toe, keeping the story fun and interesting enough to entertain the kid, but not TOO scary! :D And the last line just goes to show that Beetle's curiosity is never satisfied -- how true to character that is!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-03
|It's so great getting to see Notch with his siblings. He genuinely seems to enjoy telling them stories (even if he isn't always truthful XD). I love how, even though Beetle accepts his story, she still has questions about it.|
New! Entered: 2012-08-14
|I love getting to see what a good brother Notch is, deep down. Yes, he tends to fill cubs' heads with nonsense, but honestly, it always seems like it's coming from a generous place rather than his trying to be mean. I love the way you write him with his little sister here, he clearly values her so much.|
New! Updated: 2012-08-12
|I love to see the siblings just relaxing and having fun here. Notch seems like he'd be a great older brother to have (although maybe a little annoying, too!) I also love the story Notch makes up, it seems similar to a lot of folk stories, and you can just see how they would get started this way.|
I also can't read this title without having the rest of the poem going through my mind. :)
|Matt Di Carlo|
New! Entered: 2012-08-08
|That was absolutely adorable! I want to find out what happened to their noses too!|
New! Entered: 2012-08-08
|Hahaha, I loved the end! I could imagine how Notchs smug grin (which results from being overly proud on himself and his imagination and his story telling skills) get swiped from his face. Hahaha.|
Wonderful interaction between the siblings. Never have thought Notch would have any babysitting qualities.
New! Entered: 2012-08-07
|It's fun to see more storytelling stories -- and fun, too, to see they all don't have to be scary Crackle horror stories as well!|
New! Entered: 2012-06-19
|You know I love this story! :) I think my favorite line is this: " “Don’t worry, little bug,” he whispered with panicked thoughts of what his father would say to him if he made the cub cry again." The again. :) To know that sometimes Beetle was so sensitive she cried at his stories or antics...and to know that Coyote/Notch cares so much about her and we see he's not *Trying* to make her cry. |
I would like to know what story comes next.
New! Entered: 2012-05-04
|I just love Notch being a big brother, especially when it's Beetle he's interacting with! He lies through his teeth, but not in a "I'm-gonna-humiliate-you"-way. It seems to be more of a "you are adorable when I trick you"-kind of way. Also, the last line made me laugh.|
New! Entered: 2012-04-21
|Notch has a talent for stories. I love how he comes up with this and how he tells it to little Beetle. So darn convinced by his own words. |
Love how he's giving her such ideas and encourages her smarts at the same time. He really is a fun brother here and I love the curiosity shown in Beetle that early. She really is one who dose not simply enjoy the world but also questions it. And her way to believe and adore her big brother is just heartwarming :)
Love the last line and wonder what story Notch had in stock for this one.
New! Entered: 2012-04-11
|How cute ^^. I really like stories about Notch interacting with his siblings - his parents probably don't always like it, especially if he frightens them or gives them silly ideas, but he just is such a fun big brother! And it's great to see how Beetle's curiosity was there so early, too. Love the story - and of course that didn't answer all her questions!|