Comments on 'A Song for Butterfly'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-08-24
This is the first time I've seen a Preserver sad. So touching! Also noticed that the elves let it.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2014-08-14
This was a really well written piece, it made me tear up. It was lovely to see the Preserver's more emotional side, and to see it say some lovely words about it's first highthing friend. It must have been so hard to go through for the little one.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2014-02-15
Seeing a more emotional side of the preservers is my favorite part of this Holt's persevers. Dewdrop's grief was very un-elf like and un-human like without being alien. The song was also very preserver-like and still very emotional.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-12-28
I love the moment when Dewdrop gives up its headress on the raft, as well as when it turns to Flutterby for comfort. And the term "self-quiet" is great!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-16
Awww, how sad! But so nice to see a death ceremony - or part of holt life in general - from a Preserver's POV. I liked the little pecularities in perception like Dewdrop saw Butterfly's "spark" as the real Butterfly not her body.
BTW, Fly-Quiet Highthing is quite the tongue breaker. ;)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-08-14
Seeing the Preservers grieve in their own unique way, along with the elves, really helps to give a sense of their inclusion in the community. It also helps them seem more like individuals, and I really like that.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-06-20
You have a way with preservers, that is certain. I love that Dewdrop has to sing a song, and that the elves let it - I can only imagine what it *sounded* like, but the words were beautiful.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-04-17
This was very touching and sad. I really liked the atmosphere you created here, and Dewdrop's song was beautiful. A very touching little scene!
Melanie D.
New! Updated: 2012-04-17
That was really touching. I love how you get a strong mood in these short stories. I really could feel the numb sadness here. Poor Dewdrop. This was really really touching.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-04-10
This was beautiful and sad, as you obviously intended. I really loved how the elves leg Dewdrop have its say... er, or rather its sing. The song/poem itself was lovely, too. The freeverse kind of style really matched up well, I thought, with how a Preserver's mind works.
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