Comments on 'Perfectly Normal'
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New! Entered: 2016-08-30
|My favorite part was the last line. Oh, Notch! No matter how old you are... LOL|
New! Entered: 2014-10-05
|It seems like before Crackle was born, Notch was a worthy predecessor of her! Planting such ideas in a cubs mind, I find that very funny. But I'm sure, Starskimmer had a very stern talk with her older son shortly afterwards...|
New! Entered: 2014-10-03
|Haha, I enjoyed seeing how the images Notch put into Evervale's mind were expelled by the truth. Nice little slice of life moment here. I enjoyed the interaction between Evervale and Starskimmer - who I'm sure has introduced many a youngster to a new "Little One."|
New! Entered: 2014-02-18
|Naughty, naughty Notch !|
That guy needs the "ultimate" joke played on him one day !
Great movement in the story. It grabbed me with the curiosity of a unknown stranger first. Love the name Sweetvine too. Very visual story,it flows well.
New! Entered: 2012-12-22
|Of course Notch would fill Sweetwine/Evervale's head with lies about Otter XD The elves' view on children outside of Recognition is a theme that doesn't come up overly often, so it was fascinating to read about the misconceptions the youngest have about it. The addition of elves not being embarassed to talk about sex made it all the more 'elfin'.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
|What a lovely and sweet story. And an unusual combination of characters... but well, we have way too few stories featuring Evervale, so I guess partnering up anyone with her is something new.|
I really liked to see Starskimmer in her motherly role here. With her always beeing busy in the furs I keep forgetting how great a mother she is, too.
New! Entered: 2012-08-10
|I really liked how this story drew together so many characters into such a quiet scene -- little Evervale with Starskimmer, and even Notch, who remains off-screen. I felt like it emphasize how tight-knit a community the tribe really is.|
New! Entered: 2012-04-17
|I like how you took on two characters we didn't see together yet and put them in such a adorable situation. I really love how Notch seemed to have made his his goal to plant stupid ideas in cub's heads for such a long time. |
Starskimmer was great here I think. Put off but knowing she shouldn't blame Sweetvine for her irritation with the question but rather explain it to her. Sweetvine was very cute here too. Love how she's so shy but still open and ready to get to meet little Otter.
Really love to see you taking on some characters your own character doesn't have much contact to :)
New! Entered: 2012-04-03
|Cute :). Little Sweetvine is very sweet here, despite her fears, but she overcame them quickly enough. I like how gentle and patient Starskimmer is with her, too.|
New! Entered: 2012-04-03
|:) Such a nice glimpse of what a child can be told and how they will believe it - I really like Sweetvine's innocence and curiosity! :) And I'll guess that Notch had QUITE the talking to after this!|