Comments on 'Deep Time'
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New! Entered: 2014-12-29
|Loved the ending! Man, Copper can be so scary sometimes!!|
That scene with Bearkiller was hilarious, too. That poor mother, what a shock!
New! Entered: 2012-12-14
|This was a really cool look at one of our preservers and its relationship with members of the tribe at different times. I love how the beginning was connected to the end with Copper's line there. Though I can just imagine Fadestar's confused look when Copper calls her "cub"!|
New! Entered: 2012-07-01
|Presevers having distinct personalities and interests is always wonderful! It's so easy to have them all just go "breeedeeedeee" and worry about elves when they're not spitting wrapstuff, but it's much more fun when they're individuals! I'll definitely remember who Grugleflap is from now on :)|
New! Entered: 2012-04-03
|Glad everyone is enjoying this story! :) Chris was awesome to collaborate w/ on it! I had a lot of fun getting figuring out different ancestors, and how to weave it all together!|
New! Entered: 2012-03-27
|Hah, maybe it's the left-over bits of Crackle in me, but I found something almost creepy about some of this story - the completely unexplained and mystifying nature of Gurgleflap's fascination... |
But other than that, I always love stories that show us bits and pieces of everyday holt life like this, and this one was so vividly written - great, clear mental images all around, the water, the floating bits, the cubs, simply a delight to go through. And excellent job giving a Preserver a tangible personality, just through studying how it goes about one quirk! Clever and well-rounded and lots of fun to read.
New! Entered: 2012-03-26
|Echoing others -- I really liked in this one how this kind of gives Gurgleflap a personality hook, and also really ties it to various cubs. It manages to characterize this Preserver in a way that I don't think it has been before, and makes it stand out, which is really useful. I really like the small manifestation of Copper's magic at the end, too.|
New! Entered: 2012-03-26
|Beautiful! I love how you had a theme with Gurgleflap interacting with the cubs all the time - that preserver definitely shares a fondness for things the cubs love too! I thought it was really interesting to get a peak back at different ancestors, some names I knew and some are still vague in my head, but I think that makes the story all the more effective. Cute look at Gurgleflap's timeline! And brilliant use of Copper's magic surfacing there at the end! Loved that little twist!|
New! Entered: 2012-03-25
|That was an interesting idea. It's nice to see the personality of Gurgleflap playing out here with it's attachment to the water and the view of the many cubs.|
I think my favourite parts are those with Hawkcall and Flash, because we see some of the very unique personalities of them in such young years. ^^ The part with Brightwood was cute as well.
Liked how it somewhat closes the circle with Copper in the end.
New! Entered: 2012-03-24
|How neat to see Gurgleflap's long life through the eyes of various cubs of the tribe! I really liked that, and I especially liked that it came full circle in the end, with Copper repeating Redmane's words. Poor Fadestar, though, no wonder she was confused, seeing that Copper called her cub!|