Comments on 'The Littlest Raft'

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Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-27
You made me cry!
So good to see a reaction to this tragic event and how lovely to choose a cub as the one who brings everyone together in their grief. Wonderful!
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-25
This was so beautiful and sad! I'm so glad they had a raft for the baby. *sob* I think you chose the right perspectives for each scene, as well. Also, I loved what you said about Rill's voice knowing what to do when they all howled... Such a sweet, sad story!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-06-27
Just the title had my lip quivering. Clever Rill, helping the would-be-parents grieve. That the raft was so "poorly" made made it all the sweeter; the ceremony at the end was heartbreaking.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-03-26
It was really nice that a way to deal with this unprecedented situation came from a child. Who better to come up with an idea that wasn't bogged down by traditional ways of thinking. Rill's thought processes here seemed very natural. Of course the children would grapple with what happened.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-03-21
This was a real 12-hanky weeper of a story -- my favorite kind of tearjerker, it comes at the heartbreak from a fresh and unexpected POV. Great work!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-03-20
That was very touching, Lyn. Rill is such a gerat kid here and I like how he managed to find a way to cope with the situation and o maybe helped Snowfall, TrueEdge and Kestrel to do the same.
Lovely little story.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-03-19
Thanks, everyone. Every once in a while, a story will write itself for me... this was one of those times. :)
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2012-03-19
Thanks, everyone. Every once in a while, a story will write itself for me... this was one of those times. :)
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-03-19
This is amazing Lyn. Each time I read it brings tears to my eyes. Cubs sometimes have an amazing way, that no one expected, to make others around them feel better about something that pains them. This was a more then great way to show just that.
I love the was Suddendusk explains to Rill why there won't be a raft and the little cub just sort of rejects the idea, and goes about doing something on his own. Just fantastic.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-03-15
That was lovely, Lyn! I loved seeing Rill's approach to the grief of his family and the tribe - it's so like a child to seize upon something tangible to do to help ease someone's pain. So touching - thank you for writing it!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-03-14
I really liked this idea, Lyn. The story came out great; thanks so much for writing it!
Adrienne Willis
New! Updated: 2012-03-14
This is very moving.
When I was three my mother lost a baby. I never met him but even after 40 years I still think about him.
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