Comments on 'Puddling'
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New! Entered: 2015-05-08
|I forgot she was a wolfrider and thus part wolf! The part where she eats the grasshoppers made me gasp and be all, "Did I read that right??" But then, why wouldn't she?? Great evocation of a lazy summer day as a lone child in the woods/meadow!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
|Thanks so much, guys! ^_^|
I was inspired to write this one afternoon when I was watching an educational television show about gardens and butterflies, and I learned about the puddling behaviour. So of course I had to write it while my *own* wonder was still fresh! *grin*
I hope to do a lot more stories of this type for Chicory, too, because her love of nature was a lot of what made me want to adopt the character!
New! Entered: 2012-12-07
|I love the way you write young Chicory! Who cares about sleeping when there's a world out there to explore :D Funny, though, that she did end up falling asleep at the end. I like the way you worded that, saying she "forgot to stay awake." Very cute, fun to read story!|
New! Updated: 2012-12-23
|Ah, the life of a cub. It's always interesting to see the "current adults" as children; comparing how their personalities and behavior has changed and grown.|
New! Entered: 2012-04-17
|Young Chicory started her researcher career early. ;)|
I like your descitption of her world from the point of view of a 10 years old child. The world is so different in their eyes. Seeing her interest began in early years makes her much more believable for me as she is nowadays. Good job!
New! Entered: 2012-03-29
|This story really is so strongly evocative of the feel of a warm, lazy summer's day. I particularly like how little Chicory reasons through the process of avoiding waking her father, or her brother. ;-) And I love how it foreshadows her adult tendencies, when she naturally decides to taste the mud-puddle water for herself.|
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
|What did strike me here is how good elf kids have to be in keeping themselves busy. Especially with no close agemates around. This is something so natural for us, to have agemates.|
I love how you depicted her curiosity and her early "explorer" mind. She was beyond cute here and this whole story gives this happy giddy feel of childlike excitement :)
New! Entered: 2012-03-05
|Chicory/Acorn is such a cute little elf! I love all your descriptions of her as she plays - you definitely have a grasp on writing for a child! :) This was so fun to read.|
New! Entered: 2012-03-04
|That was a cute little story :). I loved how we see Chicory's curiosity shining through here, even if she's not exploring the river and its creatures as she so often does, and you could really feel the summery atmosphere. Very nice!|
New! Entered: 2012-03-02
|I love this story! I enjoyed looking at Acorn's younger days, with her exploring and learning things that she didn't know about before. Its always nice to see stories where an elf is by themselves and they learn something new. I also really enjoyed how it ended. :)|