Comments on 'Beetle Makes Milk'
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New! Entered: 2016-07-24
|It's natural for Quick Fang to feel protective ~ she is Cinder's original wet nurse, after all! In ancient cultures the wet nurse and/or foster mother was revered as much as ones own parent... And I'm not surprised Beetle was having trouble. It's true, she's more interested in satisfying her curiosity than children!|
New! Entered: 2014-12-29
|I liked to see Beetle's "experiment" through Quick-Fang's eyes here. One can almost feel the impatience and the motherly instincts kicking in in the whitehead.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-25
|I love that you chose Quick Fang for the perspective, here! It was so interesting, watching her instincts for motherhood and the freedom of hunting warring with one another. It was adorable how she kept growling at Beetle. :) Good thing she had Rill to help with some of her discomfort watching Beetle's clumsy first attempts! And Beetle running in wide eyed about it being so painful was so funny, poor her! Lucky Starskimmer was keeping a close eye on her and ready to come to the "rescue". :)|
New! Entered: 2012-06-27
|Oh dear, with Beetle's awkward ways around children, having her nurse one was wonderfully clumsy. I like how she was portrayed as much more interested in the process of nursing than in the actual nursing Cinder. And Quick Fang's POV was a nice touch, giving the story an extra dimension.|
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
|I agree here, that the choice of QuickFang's POV was a good one to carry that on. Probably the most interesting to me. Here I also like that Snowfall and Starskimmer seem only to pop up at the edge of awareness which fits very well, thinking how focused on Beetle and Cinder QuickFang must be to cast them aside as people who are just there. |
Love how the nursing seems nothing natural to Beetle too and how it really comes off as her being willing to help but mainly out of curiosity. The helping hand of her mother gave me this warm fuzzy feel of generations helping each other. A mother passing on her experience to her daughter.
Lovely snipped and yes I also agree that it's nice to see more of the events happening around Cinder's raising and the impact Whispersilk's loss has on every day practical situations.
New! Entered: 2012-03-02
|This was a nice little look at seeing Beetle wet nurse, and Quickfang's reaction to it. I can see why Quickfang would have a bit of trouble with Beetle feeding Cinder, even if she didn't want to be den bound, and this is a really great look at her discomfort with it.|
New! Entered: 2012-02-18
|That was a nice snippet - it's great to see more details about that time and the effort that went into raising Cinder, and I really liked seeing Quickfang's point of view here!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-15
|:) Nursing doesn't come naturally to all mothers... and I don't know that Beetle will ever feel comfortable w/ it. For her, the curiosity outweighed hte potential discomfort... though after the few days that shetried it as an experiment, she didn't wetnurse again for Cinder.|
New! Entered: 2012-02-14
|It's good to see this "experiment" explored more fully, and I'm glad to see more of Quick Fang's maturation as well!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-09
|I too think it's really nice for us to get Quick Fang's point of view, here. She has certainly been a player in these events, but more of a passive one, and that left her in danger of appearing to be a plot device rather than an individual. I really like her impatience here with how Beetle isn't catching on quickly enough!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-09
|I liked, and found it interesting, that you chose Quick Fang to be the 'eyes' of the story. It was fitting, too, that Beetle was the first to volunteer for the task! I had to chuckle a little bit as Beetle tried to figure out how to do things!|