Comments on 'Memory Games'
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New! Entered: 2013-05-21
|*laugh* I really love how Farscout sings the butterfly song again and again and AGAIN! :D That desire for repetition is definitely a small child attribute. I also thought it was cool how they sang a verse of song as a distraction between rounds of the game to make the memory game that much more challenging. I thought it was really nifty how you showed Copper's magical ability and Farscout's reaction to finding out another tidbit. I also thought it was really spot-on for a small kid that she *didn't* want to talk about it. Very intriguing.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-21
|Copper's strange magic intrigues me. Poor Farscout; it can't be easy, not knowing what's going on with his own daugther. And it can't be much easier for Copper herself, so young and yet old enough to notice when adults thing you're doing odd things. The memory game was an interesting look at what elfin parents do with their children for fun and training.|
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
|Sigh. Again so many details here, Whitney. I love this moment between father and daughter and I love to see elves do have "education games" It's something I watched with my niece and nephew how many of the games we play are to learn and train certain things. I found that reflected here :) |
Lovely song as well and the little moment when Copper's magic shined through. It was such a little thing that it easily could be taken as a weird kind of accident yet too convenient to really be one.
Also. love seeing Farscout in his daddy role ^^
New! Entered: 2012-03-03
|I really enjoyed the Butterfly song, I can see why it would be Copper's favorite. Farscout did a good job combining singing with a memory game, its a really good way to test a child's memory in a fun way! Though I'm sure he wasn't expecting her to have such a good memory!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-21
|I think my biggest regret about our Time Jump maneuver is that I would really have liked to have spent more time with Farscout getting to be a dedicated daddy. He spent centuries waiting for his chance to be a father, after all -- he would have reveled in it! I can always go back and backdate fics now and then, but I sort of feel like I missed my window of opportunity in *showing* Farscout as being a fantastic, devoted full-time dad!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-06
|I love the Butterfly Song! And this is a great introduction to Copper's magic...|
New! Entered: 2012-02-05
|I, too had been curious about Copper's magic, and you've picked a really interesting way to make it manifest! I liked how you made the event disorienting for the reader, too, as I can only imagine it must have felt for Farscout and his daughter!|
New! Entered: 2012-01-31
|I would like to thank you again for this beautiful story |
It's nice to see more and more of magical ability leaking through.
It is a wonderful story and I love the song.
New! Entered: 2012-01-31
|I really like here how that moment of seemingly shared memory is chilling, even though the memory itself is benign, even fun -- but also how it's really not clear what's going on, and Farscout has to contemplate a number of options and can't be certain of an explanation. So it feels like we've gotten a bit more information, but there's still a lot of mystery surrounding what is going on.|
The best part, though, has to be the image of Farscout the Dad, singing "the Butterfly Song". :D Love that.
New! Entered: 2012-01-30
|Whit you always have such a beautiful poetry to your stories .. that sounds kind of strange but it's true. It was such a sweet and simple moment between father and daughter and yet all of the impact just comes rushing through it like WOW .. great job as always.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-23
|Great to finally see Copper`s magical ability leaking through. Such a tender moment between father an daughter. And I really liked the little butterlfy song.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-22
|Oh, I was wondering to see how Copper's magic would manifest itself! Great to see it, especially that it appears in such an undramatic fashion, for lack of a better word. Also, I really love the memory game and the butterfly song :).|