Comments on 'Whirl-Stick'
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New! Entered: 2012-12-13
|This story was loads of fun to illustrate (which I did much later)! I learned a lot from it, because before this, I hadn't known about rabbit-sticks, nor that boomerangs (i.e. returning throwing-sticks) were known outside of Australia! I really liked how this unexpected set of weapons was worked into our tribe's history, and into their present.|
New! Entered: 2012-05-04
|Young triumph, always uplifting! I felt like I was getting to know Rill better through this story, which always is nice. The whirl-stick was a well used too for character development!|
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
|The joy of a new toy. I felt almost as giddy as Rill here when I did read this. I think you did a fantastic job in capturing the existent of a child when they set their mind on something and do enjoy it. |
Sigh. Again so much detail and so much to love. Love the characterization of the cubs here. It did strike me for some reason that Glow in the end was the one dashing around. She is clearly the youngest one in this nd the one with the most need to run *giggle* Also love the friendship between Cinder and Rill here. Cinder is such a sweet and helpful little fellow and Rill so determined.
And yeah! Boomerang! I loved the team play in the end and I really would love seeing Rill sticking with it to a point ^^
New! Entered: 2012-02-06
|There's so much here to this story! I'm enjoying stories showing Copper's magic manifesting... and what comes of it! I like that Rill gets fixed on a whirl-stick, and has to have one. Though I do think he'll find that there are better tools for hunting with, this one is still fun!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-01
|Joanne, spend a sunny afternoon at the Evergreen State College in Olympia, Washington. :D I threw a decent return on my fourth or fifth try -- but that was with some good coaching. (It was either boomerangs or hackysack, and the boomerang boys wore less patchouli. :D )|
New! Entered: 2012-01-21
|As I said before thank you so much for this story. I really love it, and it gives him something unique to be good at. It gives him so many possibilities in the future! |
I really love that last line, it makes me smile. I love your writing style. Its so detailed, but also manages to bring out the emotion that would usually be missed with more detailed stories. I get excited with Rill watching Cloudfern shapes the whirl-stick, so fantastic.
Thank you again, this is an absolutely amazing story! :)
New! Entered: 2012-01-19
|OK, I'm just jealous. I've bought 6-7 different styles of boomerangs and never gotten one to really work. I'm glad Rill had more skill than I have. :) Interesting how Copper seems to have an intuitive sense of what's possible. I love seeing Farscout in his care-provider, mentoring role.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-14
|My, Rill sure knows what he wants and does not hesitate to get it as soon as possible! This was a lovely story - I really enjoyed Farscout's hunting lesson (for some reason I found it really cute to imagine Glow running around on rabbit-flushing duty) and seeing more of the cubs. I also liked learning more about Snaptwig in the process, and it's great to see that Rill already found his weapon of choice! And as always, your attention to details is wonderful, Whit!|