Comments on 'Too Little Progress'

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Heidi Henderson
New! Entered: 2014-10-03
What I like best about this story is how realistic it is in regard to learning something new. So many times when we try to pick up something new and different, it can be a challenge and not come as easily to us as other things have. It's more fun to read about success through perseverance (and the friendships that develop as the result of a good mentor/student relationship), too!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-18
Nice to see interaction between Rainpace and Newt! And as someone whose tortured her parents while practicing an instrument, I feel for the whole tribe XD
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-03-30
There were a bunch of things that I really loved about this story. It felt so REAL to me, possibly even more-so because it features Newt, who is generally such an easy-going boy, that it's actually kind of nice to see him be frustrated by something. I really sympathized with his efforts, too; when I was his age, I briefly tried to learn the saxophone for school, and that period of time, when I was trying to practice it at home, was the occasion of a LOT of teasing from my brother and father ("dying goose"). Now that I'm older I can definitely appreciate the viewpoint of Cloudfern and Greenweave too, and their hopes that perhaps Newt will give up on that instrument. ;-)

I really like how Rainpace steps in, though, and offers help. It's lovely seeing one of the tribe's youngsters making connections with various adults. Not just because they're learning things, but because it starts to shape their own adult relationships within the tribe.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
First of all thanks for the feedback and thanks to Peggy who gave the idea for this story. I really enjoyed writing with you and thanks for being so patent. It did stand ion the back burner for a long time before I picked it up again.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-03-04
Wow this must have been really tough if it was getting such a patient young elf so frustrated. I rather enjoyed seeing how this story progressed. From taking time away from the flute, to looking for it, and then finding a teacher. I bet that was the last thing he expected to find on his return to the holt.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-01-02
Aww, poor Newt! I have to admit, One-Leg made me laugh anyway, though I feel with poor, frustrated Newt - it's hard enough to feel like you're failing without being mocked! But it's great to see that Rainpace was able to reach out to him when he was about to give up and that he promises to be the teacher Newt needs. I also really liked the playfulness he showed here - it's always nice to know that while he's the sensible one in the group of friends around Notch, he's still a prankster in his own right!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-12-31
I definitely appreciate Rainpace's patience, and how he lets Newt know that it takes more than just being able to hear a tune to be able to play it. :P)
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2011-12-27
Newt's learning that sometimes the best teachers are not the ones who make it look effortless, but the ones who have struggled themselves. I hope that with Rainpace can keep him working on it and he will be rewarded with some improvement.
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