Comments on 'Heartwood'
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New! Entered: 2016-09-04
|I wonder if a cub ever went out to find their soul name and perished? Or went out and never found it? There's a LOT of pressure to find it and its epic finding story!|
New! Entered: 2015-12-28
|I like how you showed that the soulname-search is different for every Elf. I had to laugh a bit because Littlejab is clearly so in hero worship of Riskrunner and wishes for a more eventful search. And of course, I love that the soulname came to him in this moment. It was just perfect! And I think he took his adult tribename too after his homecoming?|
New! Entered: 2014-04-22
|I love the concept of the soul name quest and this story was a wonderful take on how one can turn out! The descriptions flowed easily and that the moment the soul name came to him was peaceful concentration instead of a dramatic event was nice and suited the mood of the story very well.|
New! Entered: 2014-01-18
|Thanks for the comments! This story originally started after reading searches and thinking about how Thornbow would describe finding his soul-name to Windburn and it seemed the answer would be "it was always there". I think it would be a totally unsatisfying answer for Windburn, so I may still have to write the scene when he tells him someday! I was also pleased to be able to work out how he got his new tribe-name in there.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-28
|Wonderful idea for a Long Walk and I really liked the outcome. Guess, he not only found his soulname but a new tribe name soon after.|
Your choice of words at the end, after revealing his soul name, was very well done. The whole event was something special in its "non-spectacular" way.
New! Entered: 2012-03-30
|I love how there are many different ways that an elf can find their soul-name. For some it's a quest, and for some it happens in a moment of drama -- but it seems very fitting here for it to happen in deep communion with an activity that is clearly Thornbow's calling. I really liked how it was a part of that overall process.|
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
|I liked how finding their soulname is for each elf a very unique and personal experience that here comes along with Thornbow finding not only his secret name but also his craft and self. I think that's very fitting for him to find it like this. |
I also love how it explains his name. I already was expecting him using this thornwood to this extend.
The way Riskrunner rose his exceptions to how to find your soul was great as well. It did show clearly that his way was not Thornbow's way and his experience was wildly different from his idol's.
A very quite and beautiful story. Loved it!
New! Entered: 2012-03-04
|I honestly liked this story. Its not as action packed as some stories can be when an elf is out on their own but it captivated me none the less. I love how finding a soul name is described, so interesting and so intense. I really enjoyed this, and I makes me want to see other elves finding their soul names.|
New! Entered: 2012-02-26
|Oh, this is very nice! I agree, the way he found his soulname really fits the character. I also really appreciated the detail with his thought process on making that bow! And you showed here as well what an influence Riskrunner was on the tribal youth! ;) This story has a calm, very private feel to it, just perfect.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-02
|I think it's very fitting that it wasn't some grand, dangerous thing that made Thornbow find his soul name - that wouldn't have fit him. I really liked the details you worked into the story, and the last sentences are simply beautiful!|
New! Entered: 2011-12-31
|I really really like this - I think it's a great way for an elf on a search to find the answer... quietly, and simply! :)|