Comments on 'A Story and Skyfire'
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New! Entered: 2014-10-03
|Young Crackle has quite an imagination, doesn't she? I really enjoyed how you showcased her storytelling skill throughout here. I felt that the reaction from young, impressionable minds was very believable!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-30
|Interesting look at both Rill and Crackle's relationship, and Rill and Quick Fang's relationship. Also nice to bring up something Crackle fears but Rill loves.|
New! Entered: 2012-12-25
|*grin* Nobody in the tribe tells a good scary story like Crackle! She makes the unbelievable so plausible! I admit, for a second or two, I even found MYSELF believing that maybe, just maybe there was an RTH version of Madcoil on the loose out there! O_O I like how the story started with the unusual reversal of Crackle being the one scared while the cub isn't, then she goes and tells a story to turn that around (though she's still scared)! ;)|
New! Entered: 2012-12-13
|I really love how this story shows Crackle using her storytelling skills in a less-benign way. I mean, her tendency to tell scary stories to get a reaction from her audience isn't exactly "benign" in the first place (except that I get the feeling she regards a good scare as "fun", and thus she's trying to share the fun, not be mean). But here, I get the feeling that she's doing it in order to share her misery at the storm with her brother -- like if she's going to be scared, then she's going to make sure that he understands and is scared too! :) How very big-sisterly of her!|
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
|I can't help but love the last sentence here. Crackle KNEW this would mean trouble to her but she gladly takes that risk to just scare her little brother with a story. |
I only can agree, that I like to see Crackle still is Crackle with these stories and makes up horror for the simple nature ruling outside. Love the idea behind her story and I like the interaction between the siblings here as well. The connection felt real ^^
New! Entered: 2012-01-21
|Thank you for commenting. I really enjoyed writing this story, and I'm happy that my thoughts go across. I was really hoping that the whole 'sibling feel' got across. I'm happy to see that it has.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-12
|Nice to see that Crackle still has her scary stories and is ready to share them with young, impressionable minds ;). That was a great scene of sibling interaction, and I found it nice to see that Rill decides to flee to his mother in the end - maybe motherhood changed a thing or two about her!|
New! Entered: 2012-01-02
|You can't help but feel sorry for Rill here -- and I do wonder what literal-minded Quick Fang will think when her son tells her about the dangerous skyfire beasts! (I can only imagine that Rill will eventually wise up and demand **Send to me, so I know you're not making stuff up!** But until then.... muhahahaha! Crackle will sow many a seed for future phobias...)|
New! Entered: 2011-12-13
|This story is adorable all over. I love that as a reader, we know that Crackle's making the story up; though you also are left with the impression that just maybe she believes herself a little bit. Poor Rill... a choice between scary stories and irritable Quick Fang...|
New! Entered: 2011-12-07
|Hahaha, poor Rill. Love to see that Crackle is still Crackle with all her scary stories ans ideas and fantasies.|
And they are convincing siblings here. I remember my older brother trying to scare me often, too.