Comments on 'Letting Go of Expectations'

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Beth K.
New! Entered: 2013-05-11
This is such a great look at Honey's new role and how much of a struggle it would be. I really like how the switch of weapons helped a little - I imagine the muscle memory from spear-fishing would be really hard to translate into a throw! Great resolution. And it's so easy to sympathize with that frustration of having a tearful reaction to stress...
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-22
It's very realistic to have Honey not be that good with a spear in a new situation. Mooncrier is an interesting bond as well, showing so much impatience with Honey. They make an interesting pair to read about, what with Honey being so bad at taking any form of criticism, especially harsh criticism.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2012-03-30
This is a really valuable look at that important period of time after Honey makes her determination to become a hunter, and then has to start actually DOING it. I thought it was great that she first tries to transfer over skills she already had as a fisher... and finds that they don't translate as well as she expected. It was also just nice to see her brother helping her here; that's a relationship I want to see more of! And Snowfall makes a very logical teacher as well.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2012-03-07
Lovely. I really dig the detail of the difference of using the "same" weapon for different things. I have the feeling it's often ignored that methods on using a thing for different traits can make it hard to use them for another. Great.

Loved Honey's characterization here as well. Ohh how well do I know this way to think of every word is against you when you feel uncertain about yourself. I felt this mix of sympathy and frustration toward Honey here but it was great to see how it in the end turned out for her.

Love seeing her with her brother and Snowfall in her role as a teacher. She really is good at this :)
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-03-05
OH this is great! It was nice to see Honey growing after all that trouble. :) Though I can imagine how frustrating it would be to be no good with a spear on land, when your so good with it in the water. I think she has some right to some frustrated tears.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2012-01-15
It's great that we got to see the reasons behind Honey taking up the bow! I can well imagine that after a lifetime of fishing (hundreds of years!) it is hard to accustom to an entirely different way of using your weapon. And I really like seeing her grow! Also, I enjoyed seeing the siblings together and Snowfall as a teacher :).
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-12-14
I think my favorite part of this was the description of the burn of new muscles, and of raw fingers. Very vivid - I could almost feel what she was feeling. I like, too, seeing that Honey is growing and developing in character.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2011-12-08
Oh, Ellen, wonderful! I was wondering how Honey would do in learning another hunting method. Guess it was a long, hard way from this day till now. Her patience must be admired!
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