Comments on 'Fresh Perspective'
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New! Entered: 2015-11-19
|I felt a little sad that Windburn still views Brightwood as his "Stranger Cousin". She really is a product of an earlier time, where you HAD to be more cautious. I'm glad they honor that in her and I'm glad she is (rightfully!) on the team!|
New! Entered: 2012-12-13
|I really liked that this story used Brightwood's "new on the scene" status to give us all a fresh look at the human issue, at the same time as she was giving that fresh perspective to the tribe. It worked as a great summary of the human storyline thus far, which I felt like we could all use after the time-jump. The scenes towards the end made it seem like those on the word-hunting team really could use someone challenging their assumptions -- but I liked the sense that over time, Brightwood's own thinking might be challenged, too.|
New! Entered: 2012-07-01
|The comparsion between humans and bears was very apt, with Brightwood's experiences in mind! An interesting addition to the team; I'm very curious about how this will develop.|
New! Updated: 2012-03-05
|This was a really insightful story with lots of emotion and tension, it's good to have perspective on the HLT. I love that you thought out the small stuff -- like Evervale's 'issue.' That insight really gave me a good reason to incorporate different aspects into her clothing :) Also, I loved the use of Brightwoods plant-shaping magic, Evervale definately has a lot to learn!|
New! Entered: 2012-02-21
|This was another challenge to write. Rachel and I knew that Brightwood would want to take a Very Long Walk soon after coming out of wrapstuff, and that she'd been especially keen to see the Holt's new flavor of humans. With the sudden fast-forward of the Time Jump, it felt like we went overnight from "Brightwood has just woken up" to "Copper is grown up and it's time for Brightwood to join the word-hunters!" I would have liked to have had more time to catch our breath and explore those five years we leapfrogged over, but the trade-off of having Copper weaned and Brightwood not sidelined by a year of pregnancy makes it a fair trade. ;)|
New! Entered: 2011-11-23
|Wonderful! It´s definitely a fresh perspective and maybe Brightwood is right: the youngsters are a bit too naive. I am so curious how BW will deal with their idealism when on the same hunt.|
Some other things I liked a lot: the desciption of the village (very helpful!), the comparison with rabbits (hehe, so elves are more creative?), the reminder of wolf blood that run through the elves´ veins and makes BW still a stranger.
What did not show in this story was how Farscout feels about the humans. He seems to know so much about them and I had the feeling he accepts them in their territory. But well you never know with him. ;)
New! Entered: 2011-11-22
|I'm so glad you took this on! It was good to see Brightwood's reaction to the proximity and size of the human population. I also like the tensions set up here between BW and the HLT - especially the members who weren't "there" for teh FOs and only have memories from others. I especially like that we saw some of the tension here between BW and Beetle... not negative so much as so different! |
Thanks for taking the time to show us how and why BW got on the HLT and for showing us again that there are different motivations.
New! Entered: 2011-11-13
|I kinda love how you can take the title from two POV's. One for the Human Language Team itself and one for Brightwood herself. Well at last I do. If that was intended I don't know. |
Anyhow. It's nice to see this play out. Brightwood's strong response to the whole human thing made me wonder through. How dose Cloudfern deal with it all or did he grew simply more settled because he witnessed it all unfold and had more time then Brightwood to mend his scars.
Lot of things came to my min while reading it. I found parts where I agreed with Brightwood, nmostly toward the end, but her fierce outburst toward Beetle made me a little cranky toward her. I see where she was coming from and I'm glad she choose to join, both for her own good and the good for the HLT itself. I mostly agreed that wishes can blind you, if they are to strong, but my bias human self was a bit miffty being reduced to cruel predators who "mirror" elf behavior :P
But I really like this characterization of her. The better view at the human camps as well was very great to see. It gives me a better understanding on how they are living together.
New! Entered: 2011-11-12
|This was very well done. Brightwood's fiery temper certainly showed through. She's a powerful character, and really well played. This was a great way to show how and why Brightwood joined the HLT. I'm looking forward to what comes next.|
New! Entered: 2011-11-12
|I'm very glad to see this addressed in a story, both Brightwood's hatred of the humans and the complacency the word hunters are threatening to fall into. I can see how easy it is, seeing the two tribes being so peaceful and learning from each other, but it's true that it might be dangerous in the long run. I do hope that Brightwood will be able to keep a balance between her hatred, her caution and her willingness to learn! Also, thank you a lot for such a close "look" at the human villages through her and Farscout's eyes! It helps a lot in filling in my mental picture of the humans.|