Comments on 'The Storm's Passing'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-11-08
When Blacksnake used Windburn's soul name to snap him back to himself, it was so touching I was crying! That in itself was a great story-of-its-own worthy event! What a great healing for father and son!! Especially touching because Blacksnake is now the only person left who knows Windburn's soul name!
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-11-26
My favorite part of this story is just the range of emotions experienced by Blacksnake, and with the lovely way it's written, I almost feel those emotions myself. It was wonderful to read the exchange between Blacksnake and Windburn at the end...it was realistic and also a bit of a tear-jerker. I imagine this subject must have been hard to write about, but you really pulled it off here!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-06-27
Even knowing who it was that had died, I was on the edge of my seat as the hunters made their way back to the Holt. Seeing Blacksnake in the role of worried parent, along with his inner conflict over what happened after Easysinger's death and how it reflected on the current situation, was very interesting and touching. The story as a whole had me quite emotional; I really miss Whispersilk, even though she died before I joined River Twine as a player. The stories that talk about her death are just that good.
Larissa Johnston
New! Entered: 2012-03-05
This was so very very full of emotion - well done! It was nice to see all the little insights into Blacksnakes character and also his past. I love the emotion in the scene towards the end, had my eyes welling up with emotion!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-11-04
Thanks, guys. :) I'm glad this is something that readers are finding effective (because it's hard for me to tell if it will be). Trying to write this intimidated me for a long time, and I was really glad to get it done. And even though I knew for a long time how I wanted to do it... there are still some personal insights in here, on Blacksnake's part, that didn't come to me until I was actually writing. So that's probably what I'm most pleased with.
Joanne P.
New! Updated: 2011-11-03
This is so well done! It really shows the drama and emotion that can be evoked just by viewing events through the filter of one character's experiences. But what I really love the most is the description of the hunters hunkered down to wait out the storm. I could just hear the sound of the ice falling on the leather and was shivering there beside them.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-11-03
I don't even know what to say. I think what moved me the most is that finally something happened I was hoping to see in one story. Blacksnake showing his son that he cares.
There was so much insight into Blacksnake, so much he admitted to himself, so much that showed he grew to accept and regret.

This was touching and emotional and a very deep look into Blacksnake and what moved him in the past and to this date.

I also liked the details in it but ion the end the raw emotions were what remained standing out.
Laura Melis
New! Entered: 2011-11-02
I think this is a very moving and pivotal story. I enjoy all the written encounters that have been shared, but a story like this really lays the groundwork for not just the atmosphere of the the tribe, but their connection to each other. Fabulous! Blacksnake is an anchor type of character and in having such stability really gives the tribe (and their players) a boost and direction. Thank you for sharing your stories and art!!!! :)
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-11-01
Wow, Holly, this was incredible. There is so much here that I don't even know where to start commenting ... I loved all the little rich details you provided, the insights in Blacksnake's thoughts - he's lived a long life, and it's great to see the wisdom he has gained from it, such as accepting the relief when hearing it's not someone close to you who has died. And it's so wonderful to see how this helps him to understand and reach out to his son and finally show him that he loves him. Maybe something good will come of this for their relationship!

Wonderful work!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-11-01
Holly, this is so emotionally powerful. I know I'd read it before, but I had to read it again before commenting. I cannot say "well done" enough - The scene between WB and BS is so well executed and had me crying. I'm really glad to see that this pivotal moment led at last to some healing, and maybe the chance to re-build.

I liked Blacksnake's introspection throughout! :) Thank you.
Linda Aarts
New! Entered: 2011-11-01
If I still miss Whispersilk around -- I can't imagine how it must feel for Windburn. I loved how this was written from Blacksnake's POV, hoping to reach out to his son before it was too late. And surprisingly, that was by opening up himself -- You almost had me cry! Also, I think the title is well-chosen; it not only represents the physical storm and the emotions going through Blacksnake while they return to the holt, but also Windburn's return from his wolfy side.
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