Comments on 'Learning to Loose the Arrow'
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New! Entered: 2014-08-15
|I'm particularly glad for this fic showing a relationship between those two cubs, who do seem closer in temperament than they are to the wilder Rill and Glow - it just makes sense for them to have such quiet, focused moments like this, sharing "adult-things" like learning a skill, and both being so level-headed about it. It's interesting to think of Cinder as being such a thoughtful, logical cub, when I'm more used to thinking of Windburn - and definitely Foxtail! - as a creature of instinct more connected to his wolf-gut. Blacksnake's genes showing, perhaps? ;)|
New! Entered: 2012-12-23
|Lovely bonding moment between the two cubs. I also liked how we might just have seen a hint of Copper's special gift or that it maybe simply was her being a natural teacher.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-28
|I really enjoyed looking at Cinder, and him trying to learn something new and at the same time see a small part of Copper's personality and their relationship. I love that his agemate was able to teach him something rather then an adult, it just adds something to it. :) Good stuff!|
New! Entered: 2011-11-05
|What kinda stood out to me was the image of Copper hanging upside down - it seems like such a "child" thing to do that I found it a great contrast with her wise words. It's a good reminder that she's still a child, despite her more mature behaviour :).|
Otherwise, I really like seeing more of Cinder here - he's so calm and rational even though you can still see he's a child, too, and doesn't take frustration easily. Great to see that he was receptive of Copper's advice. Looking forward to more of this!
New! Entered: 2011-10-06
|Cinder is a very down to earth child. I really like the way you portray him here and copper too. I like it that we don't see much of what she is thinking but just her reaction. It makes her wise in a childlike way. |
Aside from what all the others already said I gotta say. I am fascinated how may of the stories about bow-lessons. I would kinda like to see sparring with spears or knifes or other weapons of use again :P
But that's nothing to do with this story. I really like it and can't wait to see more :)
New! Entered: 2011-09-20
|Wow, who hasn't been there. Learning something new and concentrating on getting everything just right so much that the end result is miserable. Cinder seems like such a conscientious kid, I'm glad someone was there to encourage him to just let it fly.|
New! Entered: 2011-09-19
|What I like most about this, Matt, is how it shows Cinder coping with the idea that he should try to become good at archery, even though he's already good at using a sling. It really shows that he's willing to try to learn -- including that he's willing to listen to Copper and try her suggestion. Good character study!|
New! Entered: 2011-09-13
|I like this look at the kids of the Holt trying new things. And I really like Cinder's receptiveness to Copper! :)|