Comments on 'Little Lessons'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-03-08
Aaahhh, the Lesson of I'll Leave if You're Not Ready!!! We've taught that many a time, with the car driving away and a little one frantically racing to catch it in the rear view mirror!! Never had the hair issue though. I would have cut it!! LOL! Nice Grandmother!!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2015-11-18
These are two perfect little lessons wrapped up in a really sweet story. I really like the interplay between little Moonmoth and Shyheart, his grandmother. Shyheart definitely projects a sense that she's done this a few times before and knows how to get through to the cubs in the best way possible.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-05-03
Awww, this is still so sweet! It's a nice look at the family dynamic pre-Fierce Ones and shows contrasts between Shyheart and Sunlight (as well as Moonmoth of course).
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-14
That was really enjoyable. I love how Moonmoth's grandmother is so sensible and down to earth, but still indulged her grandson a little bit. Though Moonmoth really should put his hair back. XD
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-11-05
Than was a nice little snippet :). I agree, it's great to see a carefree Moonmoth and see some of our ancestors that we haven't read much about before. I really like Shyheart here, such a practical elf but still very gentle and loving! And yeah, I also loved seeing some realism regarding elves with superlong hair, too XD.
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-10-06
A nice little story. I think we didn't Cloudfern see in his childhood after the traumatizing happening often and it's nice to see him with his relatives who took care of him and second family and not all spooked and scared for a chance but nothing but a child.
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2011-09-20
I like Shyheart - she seems a practical type. I love the gentle lesson of there being consequences to actions: "If you're not ready, you don't go." I also wonder how things like this don't happen more often with all these elves with super-long hair running around. :)
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-19
i like what an impulsive little kid this shows Moonmoth to be -- but also, it's just nice to have a glimpse of him with family members whom we don't see often! Great to get some more characterization of Shyheart, in particular.
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2011-09-14
LOL! This is great, Lyn! Such a cute little Moonmoth, I do declare. I really like how his aunt and grandmother let him work things out for himself, but they keep a close watch on him and are always there to help him in the end. :) I love your description of the plantshaping magic here, too. Cloudfern with short hair? Hmmm... That could have had its possibilities, poor cub!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-09-13
When I wrote this, I had an image of little Cloudfern with short hair in mind... but he was insistent that he keep his hair. So... this story turned out to be not what I originally intended. Hope that it's enjoyable, though!
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