Comments on 'Attack of the Killer Reptile'

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Lea R.
New! Entered: 2015-01-29
Oh, great! I like how you build up an anticipation and it turns out as something else! And I love how good you can see the personalities of all three Elves in their behaviour.
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-30
It's nice seeing Crackle "use her powers for good". Nice bonding moment between the three of them :)
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-12
I actually expected this to turn out just a bit longer than it did, but I like it the way it came out. :) My sister actually suggested the title, in the style of a cheesy old "b-movie" title. I'm glad you all enjoyed it so much! I just love the storytelling aspect of Crackle's character, and had fun getting to show a glimpse of it. :)
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-11-13
I love all the stories showing Crackle's growing expertise at storytelling, and this one is no exception! Amazing how she can turn something so mundane as a lizard eating an earthworm into something much more interesting!
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-21
That story was really short, but effective. I love the tension building up as is went toward the dentrees only to have to turn out to be a small little lizard! XD Its a really good piece of writing that I really enjoyed reading. :)
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-11-05
Haha, awesome! That was so much fun - really great how effectively you used the reader's expectations from the title to fool us! I love seeing Crackle in her element, and how Glow eats it up. And it's a wonderful example of what you can do with such a short piece. Great work!
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-19
Very effective! It's a great reminder of the imagination that's always been one of Crackle's hallmarks, and how it takes just a bit of imagination to see the drama inherent in even very small things.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2011-09-09
This is a lot of fun -- it packs quite the punch for its size! I love the last, lingering image of this three, sitting in the rain and watching the creepy-crawlies. Wonderful!
Joanne P.
New! Entered: 2011-08-26
That is not the story I was expecting from the title, and I'm so glad! I love seeing how Crackle adds excitement to everything by finding a new perspective, and how Glow is just eating it up!
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-08-22
I <3 how Crackle is growing up, and remaining Crackle! :) She is in her element telling the story, but it's still true to life and happening as she tells it. Glow is one lucky little cub to sit under such a vibrant storyteller!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2011-08-19
Loved to see Chicory with Glow and how protective she is with her cub. Normally she would do the same as Crackle: no care in the world for the rain.
Also liked how proud she seems to be when seeing the same curiosity in her child she owns herself.
Tabitha Rosbergen
New! Entered: 2011-08-19
it's just ... WOW
how you have build that tansion up right from the start
I love it
and it is very clear how Glow looks up to Crackle
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-08-19
Awesome! Love the imagery you build up and how you demonstrated how the right words can make even the smallest thing a mighty hunter.
Found myself grinning and already sensing what you were doing but it was just so much fun!
Laura Melis
New! Entered: 2011-08-18
this totally took me in. I thought some one was going to be lunch for sure--some one big, that is. Very imaginative!
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