Comments on 'Backtracked'
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New! Entered: 2013-01-14
|I also really liked how this touched on something we don't see in ElfQuest, this solid piece of realism in the fantasy - I think stories like that really add to the, how to say, the tangibility of the world. And of course to see Suddendusk's and Quick Fang's different parenting styles (heh!) really whets one's appetite to learn more of what it's like growing up for Rill, between those two complete opposites... I also found it really interesting, I have to say, how Quick Fang's cuff on the ear was treated as a natural thing to do, I mean, you might agree or disagree with it, but there's no doubt that for the Wolfriders cuffing a child who misbehaved in such a frankly dangerous way is acceptable. And it's their standards that they need to be held up to. Another touch of realism there you could say.|
I also really enjoyed the descriptions of the winter scenery and Softjoy in the snow. Black wolf on white snow, so pretty!
New! Entered: 2012-04-23
|I'm ashamed of that I hadn't thought about that problem applied to wolf bonds, even though I knew a horse where the former owner had done that, started training when the mare was only a year old. (And this person was a respected vetrinarian.) I'm glad that Rill is willing to learn from the mistakes his mother did when she was at his age.|
New! Entered: 2012-02-20
|Folks, I just LOVE our art/fic trade system! Because of the trade system, I'm forced to write fics I would have never otherwise have thought of. This fic was inspired by a good friend of mine who is training up a young colt -- who she can't ride yet, unless she wants to risk the horse's long-term health. I realized that hey -- wolfriders would have the same issue. A wolfrider just can't leap onto a yearling wolf's back and go riding, not without risking that wolf's future soundness.|
New! Entered: 2012-01-27
|This I felt was a good lesson for a young elf to learn. Goodness knows how many times he heard that lesson, of not riding your wolf friend until they are ready and just shrugged it off like it wasn't a big deal. QF's send reinforced with SD's words were a really effective way to teach him. Great story! :)|
New! Entered: 2011-09-19
|Wonderful look at what kind of parenting team Suddendusk and Quick Fang make! And a look at how Rill tries to live up to his father's expectations. It's also just a nice reminder about the realities of riding wolves -- but Rill's little-kid impatience makes sense, and I love the sense that to a kid his age, 6 months seems like *forever* to wait.|
New! Entered: 2011-07-21
|I really enjoyed reading this. Not only because it pointed out something about the Wolfrider life that I hadn't even considered, namely the dangers of riding a wolf only half-grown, but also because it showed Quick-Fang's and Suddendusk's disctinctly different parenting styles. Very interesting and well-written! :)|
New! Entered: 2011-07-09
|:) A joy to read this. As always, your descriptiveness is very helpful in visualizing what is happening and understanding the elves and the world they live in better. :) I really like the look at Rill and how he is the best of both his parents! :)|
New! Entered: 2011-07-08
|A wonderful story! I love anything having to do with the elves and their wolf-bonds and I think you handled the slow growth of the wolf cubs just perfectly. Quick Fang was perfect, both in her handling of her cub and her brusque concern for Softjoy's health.|
New! Entered: 2011-07-07
|Such a beautiful fic!!! It was so interesting to get a glimpse of the different ways Suddendusk and Quick-Fang raise their boy. I really, really liked this story.|
To see that the wolfblood runs so strong in QF was fascinating.
New! Entered: 2011-07-01
|I really liked the portrayal of Rill and his cub-logic, and it is good to see Quick Fang and Suddendusk acting jointly as parents, each with their own style.|
New! Updated: 2011-06-30
|I've often wondered how the adult elves dealt with bonding to a wolf cub, whether they just had to sit out hunts until their wolf was ready to ride and do their best doing what they can around the holt. I always thought it would leave them kind of left out, I imagine it would be 10 times more frustrating for a child. I like the way Suddendusk explains the relationship between elves and wolves. He seems like such a great dad.|
New! Entered: 2011-06-29
|This is wonderful and addresses something that I've never thought of before - the actual physical ability of the ride instead of just the emotional or mental willingness. It was sobering to imagine any of the tribe hurting their bonds and I can only imagine how deeply such a thing would wound. |
All that food for thought and some gloriously clear imagery and sense-writing!
New! Entered: 2011-06-28
|That was cute. And interesting. It touches an issue I again didn't think about but now it was brought up it seems so self give! The riding thing... yeah that can't be good on their backs if they are not strong enough. Very cool Whit! |
I also loved the intraction here between father and son and mother and son. QuickFang seems the stern part while Suddendusk is so patient. I like how he seems to test his son's wits while taling. And I found myself wondering during the story if QuickFang had waited. Nice to have the answer right there :D
I also liked the hinting that Rill is a bit jealousy on Copper :P These band of kids will grow up to be very interesting !
New! Entered: 2011-06-28
|Oh, this was neat! I really liked seeing Rill with his parents here - I don't think we've seen much of him and them since he's grown. Rill really seems to have a lot from both parents. And that was a good lesson - for myself as well because I've got to say, I never thought about when a wolf is ready to be ridden and what would happen if he wasn't. Lovely work, Whitney!|