Comments on 'A Dream Not Yet Realized'
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New! Entered: 2016-08-03
|Awkward City!! Erg, I can't imagine wanting a child so badly I'd have a family member help/watch. Small Holt indeed! :P|
New! Entered: 2012-06-28
|Poor Willow, no success and having to watch her grandmother joining; I know elves are much more accepting of sex as part of life, but that had to be awkward at first. Sad that there was no results, but One-Leg and Starskimmer sure stopped the mood from getting to sobern!|
New! Entered: 2012-01-28
|I like this story. It was sad, but not all together unexpected. You can't expect to get it right the first time, right? Though I can completely understand the feeling of being a little disappointed. I have to say I did enjoy when Starskimmer and One-Leg came in, it added a bit of fun to the whole story. Nicely written.|
New! Entered: 2011-09-19
|I really like the ending to this, with One-Leg and Starskimmer's entrance, and how their boisterous attitude lightens the mood of what could have been a somewhat melancholy story. Good choice on that. :)|
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
|I'm just glad that this group of elves isn't one to give up... that although the first attempt failed, they won't quit now! :) It will be fun to see them keep trying... and hopefully, one day, to succeed!|
New! Entered: 2011-07-08
|It will be interesting to see if they succeed! While this first time was disappointing, Willow is still young and learning and hopefully will continue to mature into her healing powers. I love the little cameo of Starskimmer and One-Leg, randy pair that they are, as well.|
New! Entered: 2011-06-20
|Aaw pore Willow, Snowfall, Kestrel and True-Edge they wanted a baby sow badly.|
I really hope it will succeed in another tray.
New! Entered: 2011-06-18
|I only can add up o the voices saying I liked the realism here. The first try was not the on... and through I'm sad fro the three of them and sympathies with Willow I agree with True-Edge. It would have been too lucky if the first try. |
I like how ... awkward the first bit feels until Snowfall steps in and tries to lift their spirits and take away the pressure. (at a side note .. One-Lg you just crack me up!) I was somehow glad it was touched that having your granddaughter into his would feel a little odd even for elves.
I also liked the touch of One-Leg and Starskimmer in the end :) It really gave the whole thing a hopeful note ... and holly mother elves MUST have better stamina then us puty humans.
New! Entered: 2011-06-17
|Most of all I liked that even for elves being watched in intimate moments can be uncomfortable sometimes. The issue of Willow and Kestrel being relatives was nicely worked out.|
And great that you kept it realistic. Would have been much luck if it would have worked out at the first time.
New! Entered: 2011-06-15
|I'm still sorry I didn't manage to contribute to this one :( ... But you three did a terrific job! I really like how believable their nervousness is, not because of human hang-ups but because that is a huge and rare thing to do even for elves. And I absolutely loved the addition of One-Leg and Starskimmer at the end - for one, because I'm really curious about the tribe's reaction to their endeavour and second, because it provides some comic relief and enables the story to end on a more positive note. I don't doubt they will practice a lot for the next try :p!|
New! Entered: 2011-06-09
|I like this story, because it's very realistic. I like that it doesn't work the first time they try to get a child outside recognition. It's more believable that it needs more than one attempt to get pregnant, especially for a young and inexperienced healer like Willow.|
I look forward to the following stories about this threesome and their wish for a child!
New! Entered: 2011-06-06
|Touching story. I feel so sad for Willow, Snowfall, Kestral and True-Edge. This story brings up all my academic questions of how elf biology is different from human and what exactly Recognition does.|