Comments on 'Depths'

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Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-11-09
This is one of those stories that really sticks with you for a long time after reading it. As others have said, the perfect word for it would be "intense." It's definitely a side of Greenweave that I was not expecting, but it is fascinating all the same!
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-08-12
Woaah... First off, let me say that this is the absolute PERFECT title! And on the gore/warning; I did find the warning very welcome, because even though I read it anyway, I was prepared for it! (I'm not personally fond of horror, and have never read Steven King, etc.) I agree with others, the gore, violence, and creepiness was all very tasteful AND purposeful, so I really didn't have a problem with it! I found myself deeply appreciating the meaning behind everything you put in. I can also tell you that I personally identify with Greenweave here, also having the kind of mind that sometimes "alters" memories as I relive them, either with horrible could've beens or through wishing to change the past for the better, having to "manually" correct them as I go along! The tumultous confusion of the dream was excellent! You kept it just off-balance enough that it was very dreamlike, yet from start to finish this was a coherent story following an unwavering pattern! I really have to say well done! I also found Cloudfern's involvement in Nettle's death to be very interesting, as well as what it must have meant for Coudfern and Greenweave to eventually get past it to the point of LIFEMATING! nd even without a wolfrider's nose, I knew what you meant about the after-nightmare scent of fear and fight! Wow! Good story. :D
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-27
Oh wow.. just wow. There is very little I can say that others haven't already said. I'm not suprised that the death of his wolf friend had brought up other memories of death, but the fact that Greenweave's mind can be so warped as to do that to the dream Cloudfern and to see a three sets of arms from his father's body... such deeply disturbing imagery. Well written.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-19
Oh my! I think what I like best about this story is that usually, Greenweave seems to have a fairly placid exterior, calm and kind. But this really shows how turbulent his depths can be, and you get a glimpse in here of a wolfrider who can be as fierce and angry as any other. That's really cool. And, it makes me want to know more about his relationship with both of his parents; the glimpses of them here are intriguing.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
At first read, I had a hard time sorting the dream from reality... and now that I've read it again, I like that. It makes it that much more poignant. I look forward to seeing what will come of these nightmares! I'm glad that Greenweave has such a strong relationship with Cloudfern... and I wonder... Is the bond of Recognition with Honey enough that she realizes something's not right?
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2011-06-23
Oh, so wonderfully horrific! Nightmares are hard to write, but you did so perfectly. Especially the last scene, with the hands and Tossfur, sent shivers down my spine. Still, it felt like the nightmare had a point and wasn't just pointless creepiness for the sake of scaring the reader.
Joan Milligan
New! Entered: 2011-06-22
You know, I pride myself on my EQ horror, but you've outdone me here by far - not only for the scary factor (although I squeaked a little at the last scene with Tossfur) but also with making it a poignant description of the dark depths (heh, yes) that a calm soul can hide. Greenweave is sweet and kind and gentle but he isn't innocent, and it makes perfect sense that the pains in his life could fester in this way. You've artfully added a whole new layer to the character here, just in the one story, and also managed to make it blend seamlessly in with the rest of him.

(I was also very interested to see the no-holds-barrel description of Nettle's suicide - that being what it practically was if I got it right. I don't think we've ever before directly touched on the fact that an elf would do this. Really makes you think...)
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-06-18
I told you already... his was intense. In a good way. It's really interesting to see how "deep" Greenweave is. All this fear and anger and guilt he seals within his dreams. The gory images really only added up to the strong emotions.

This was a well balanced piece of writing but I curse my rather visual imagination now :P The cinema in my head turned on and did refuse to let me blend out the images XD Yet I enjoy a good chill so it's alright.

I feel for the poor guy. So much in his past he sure wishes to make undone. *hugs Greenwave*
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-06-17
Wow, this was intense 0_0. It was great to see such a rough, wild side to sweet Greenweave - it's very fitting that as someone who rarely shows hurt and anger in reality (at least, as I see it from what I read about him so far), those feelings come forward in his dreams. The gore was rather strong but I thought it was still handled tastefully. Props on that! I'm glad to see that though he misses Lightjaw, Greenweave can find some comfort in his family, even though he didn't dare to ask Cloudfern for more comfort.

Cloudfern and Newt (and all of the tribe) sure are lucky he doesn't dream-send, though!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2011-05-16
Great stuff. And I must admit I was very surprised to see gentle, calm Greenweave so... wolfish. Very interesting and quite promising. Very curious how this will effect him in the future.
Hannah Bochart
New! Updated: 2011-05-14
Zowie, horror comes to RTH with a vengeance! Extremely good work here. You were able to deliver a great couple of gory images here, but nothing seemed excessive. Everything you did here was to further the story and that was great. I loved seeing lifemates pitted against each other, it was so shocking and devastating it left me stunned. You've a great ability to blend the horror with the serene, because even though poor Greenweave's mind is a mess of conflict and terror, the final moments really seem peaceful, if sad. The sweet boy has past, and yet he is still surrounded by his present.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2011-05-14
Wow. Just. Wow. Fantastic stuff here, Suzanne! I'll admit, my first reaction was simply when I saw the title listing on the Fiction page -- "A warning label! INTERESTING! Now how do I get me one of those?" ::grin:: I was prepared to squirm! However, I don't think the gore here was "too much" -- it gives the already-powerful emotional core of the story just the right punch, and certainly is FAR more tasteful than the average Stephen King novel. You capture so well that life for the wolfriders ain't all idyllic. I love this one! Great work!
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