Comments on 'Taking Up the Torc'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2015-05-22
I love how Blacksnake is depicted as a "canny old wolf" and how Windburn is afraid of him even though he's not back (yet!). It also shows that he feels/knows his dad doesn't think he will do a good job and will challeng. Confirmation of his deepest fear!
Beth K.
New! Entered: 2014-08-30
There is an almost surreal calmness about this scene. It's obviously incredibly emotional, but there's the sense that characters are still in shock which makes it almost feel like the calm in the centre of the storm. Windburn is really strong in his quiet way here, and it's great to get another glimpse into the relationship he has with Blacksnake and the worries about a possible challenge rather than support. Snowfall's decision is interesting too; and I suppose it makes sense. It's really great to see her in action as an advisor!
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2012-12-28
Wonderful dramatic and atmospheric fic! I am happy for Windburn that he had such a wise and even-headed councelor in such a hard time. Snowfalls description of Blacksnake srprised me, though... loved the way she pointed out his flaws in such a neutral tone.
I was also not aware of the fact that no other elf at this time point has lived under another chief. This makes Windburn's burden even heavier!
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-12-23
There is so much conflict here, even if the conversation between Windburn and Snowfall is calm. Loved it! You really brought out how surreal it was that Easysinger had died, with no one remembering a time before here. It's hard to picture that, being human and all, but this story painted it well,
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-12-14
I love this glimpse into such an uncertain time in Windburn's life. This story really makes him feel like a well-rounded character, despite being an NPC. It's even better reading this again after knowing how he's really grown into the role of chief and stepped up when the tribe needs him to be a leader.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2012-02-21
When I wrote this, I wanted to create a moody one-scene that would compliment what was going on for Blacksnake in "Undecided", and I thought that in the wake of Easysinger's passing, that having Snowfall step up and be a calm word of wisdom in Windburn's ear at a critcal moment in his life would be especially fitting.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-15
This must have been so hard for Windburn, and you can really see his struggle when he is talking to Snowfall. To have to replace his Mother as Chief while the wound in his heart is still so fresh is a terrible burden. It kind of makes me sad that he knows that his father would challenge him when he got back. Its not like it was something easy for him to begin with but then for his only left parent to disagree with Windburn being chief... sigh. Great emotion is this story.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-20
This is a great look at that moment in time, and the undercurrents of it. Easysinger's death must have hit the tribe terribly hard, but I'm glad to see Snowfall being practical here and giving Windburn the nudge he needs to do what he should. What I find particularly interesting in this is his adamant belief that Blacksnake *will* return -- hardly a given at that point, but it's clear that Windburn can't conceive, or doesn't want to conceive, of losing both parents at once.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Updated: 2011-07-27
Thank you, Whit, for this story (I'm just sorry I haven't commented sooner). It's wonderful to see the dilemma Windburn faced, and to know that Snowfall was there to help encourage and guide him.
Karena Kliefoth
New! Entered: 2011-07-08
I found this story fascinating- Windburn's facing his mother's death and his duty as chief made for some great dilemmas! Would Riskrunner have been more suited to chiefdom? We'll never know of course, and I love the concern on Windburn's part about his father's response. Snowfall is great, too, as the tribe counselor/storyteller who holds the tribe's history in her mind.
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-06-19
I'm sorry I'm late in commenting on this, Whit ... But I absolutely love it! It's great to finally see Windburn's reaction to Easysinger's death and his decision to accept the Chieftainship, and I love seeing Snowfall as the calm and wise counsel he needed in this moment. And the mood in this story is just terrific - especially the first few paragraphs take your breath away, they're so intense.

Thank you again so much for writing this!
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-06-18
That was such a mood story. It's nice to see more of Windburn and his deeper self. How much his father manages to ruffle him up even if he's not there. Great piece of writing Whitney. The last paragraph really drove it home!
And I agree. I love seeing Snowfall here. The gentle, calm supportive spirit to hold his back, Yet she's loving and caring it seems all her words are spoken true to her thoughts, wits and feel. VERY great and cool story.
Kyna Hansen
New! Entered: 2011-04-01
I didn't realize we hadn't seen much written about Windburn taking over as Chief so this was nice. I liked seeing Snowfall in action as the calm and logical counsel to her chief.
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