Comments on 'Skin to Skin'

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Ingrid G.
New! Entered: 2016-08-05
Wow, I would never have imagined someone like Rainpace saying sarcastically "You want to JOIN or something?" (Um, buddy, your should be so lucky!!) Evervale was put on the spot, "No, um, maybe, uh.." Can tell she's not used to being turned down!! Beetle's all, "Oh, we're going to do it?" strips, yawns, and goes back to sleep!! (At least that's the way I read it!) ;)
Lea R.
New! Updated: 2014-12-24
Grumpy Rainpace is funny! And the simple solution to the problem was without doubt very effective. And Evervale's answer about the question of joining is just hilarious! (And I how Beetle managed to sleep through the whole exchange... Great!)
Razzle C.
New! Entered: 2012-12-26
Teehee! Very cute. :) And very true -- clothes can get in the way of getting/staying warm with shared body heat! Rainpace is a funny grump, and Evervale kept saying hilarious things (like the answer about joining). I get the idea Beetle didn't mind being woken up, too much! ;)
Sofia Lindström
New! Entered: 2012-06-27
Best way to keep warm, in my opinion! The description of the cold was very well done; I was almost shivering where I sat and it's June.
Larissa Johnston
New! Updated: 2012-03-05
Cute! I like that there was such a simple solution to the problem at hand. :D
Megan McCarthy
New! Entered: 2012-01-30
I definitely got a giggle out of this one XD It's rather funny how Rainpace and Evervale are arguing (albeit through sending, but still), but Beetle just wants to get her sleep, cold or no.
Emberra Owen
New! Entered: 2012-01-27
XD Haha! I didn't realize how grumbly Rainpace could be. I also really liked how Evervale was the voice of reason, and didn't really snap at Rainpace for being so whiny. Overall, it was really just an enjoyable read.
Holly H.
New! Entered: 2011-09-20
I really like how Evervale gets to be the practical one here, and Rainpace the grumpster. :) But I also like how Beetle barely wakes up for it all.
Lyn Cavalier
New! Entered: 2011-07-27
This one was a little difficult to think of, but once it came, it was fast to write. :) Finding the situation where Rainpace would be grumpy... not the easiest! :) Glad it worked, though, and that you liked it!
Mareike Heilemann
New! Entered: 2011-06-22
Nice snapshot! Never would have thought that Rainpace is the grumbling type but it's very funny and adorable here. Also really nice to see Evervale's calm, gentle hand in handling him (loved the answer to the joining question XD).
Melanie D.
New! Entered: 2011-06-17
what a nice little moment. It's really nice to see Evervale taking the situation in her hand and I agree... grumpy Rainpace is adorable *sicker* Males... always complaining and always having a one traced mind XD
Joan Milligan
New! Entered: 2011-05-05
Aww, it's a sweet moment. Nice to see Evervale taking the lead for once, and grumpy Rainpace is cute too. There were a few "as you know" moments in the story, but overall it was an adorable snapshot.
Peggy B.
New! Entered: 2011-03-12
Yaay for grumpy Rainpace. :D And Evervales´ answer to RP asking her about joining, made me laugh. Very nice to see her in action.
Whitney Ware
New! Entered: 2011-03-07
Fun! Very resourceful of our heroes. As a reader, I found the full listing of everyone involved in the hunt a little unnatural to the ear, but otherwise the dialog was quippy and humorous. Almost wanted a droll "Work work work..." out of Rainpace there. ;)
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